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Old 03-17-06, 08:27 PM   #1
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First thing i've written in over 2 1/2 months.

... Journey with me, across the sea of pain an' insane ...
Where's said the stained, wood pained blame remains
Innate shame rains, like the tears of a past movement
... Shrewd and prudent as the sky falls to prove it ...
It's not new it's ... Been content to cement stagnant
Watched from creation to the crumbling nations patient
... Aimless taunts to one so bold as to claim benign ...
To avoid the rye crime of simply speaking the mind
But time turns and churns words and burns until its flipped
And the sands slip down toward the tip of a new trip
To brew myth as memories fade and lessons are re-taught
As the committed lives of the frivolous minds tick-tock
...
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Old 03-17-06, 08:28 PM   #2
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Links inc. soon mofo's.
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Old 03-18-06, 05:59 PM   #3
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This was nice, really feelin it. The vocab was very good and imagery was nice too. Flow was great for me, no trouble with it. I really didnt see anything wrong with it. My favorite bars were:

Journey with me, across the sea of pain an' insane ...
Where's said the stained, wood pained blame remains
Innate shame rains, like the tears of a past movement
... Shrewd and prudent as the sky falls to prove it ...

^^I thought that was hot. Please rtf on anything in my sig. Nice drop man keep it up. Thanks and Peace.

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Old 03-18-06, 09:52 PM   #4
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nice voacb n flow .. i liked this peice
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Old 03-19-06, 10:37 PM   #5
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Closed no links , Pm me two links and ill have this re-opened
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