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06-04-06, 05:38 PM
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Banned: Biting
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Letting It Slip Away - song
IP: 4381 3163
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2760968
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2760970 I know now my feelings are getting harder to hide It tears my heart up inside I need protection no armor provides But saying you’re fine without me? That’s like saying the waves ain’t part of the tide You once walked out of my life so gracefully It was a sight I knew I’d hate to see For the thought of us, in your heart, had no place to be I didn’t run away from my chance, my chance ran away from me I do want you to be happy, that’s no lie But when I see you with her I wanna die Emotion takes over, from the picture my mind drops I wish I could rewind clocks Make time stop So I could make a minute with you last an eternity We’re not perfect, but we fit so perfectly To me, this feeling in my gut is new All my previous views of love have been cut in two And now I don’t know what to do You’re the man of my dreams but my dreams don’t live up to you Maybe I’m crazy, maybe I need therapy When my arms are wrapped around you and I miss you terribly But maybe I’m not insane Maybe I know exactly how to explain The fact that you’re always on my brain My lips whisper your name And I feel no shame But there’s a void I unwillingly fill with pain When it can just as easily be filled with you I said I loved you once and it still is true And honestly, I can say I didn’t expect this But it’s your heart and I’m never gonna be reckless I know better than to waste your time with flattery Cuz a single gaze from your eyes could shatter me And if I know at all who you are, I haven’t gone too far So if this doesn’t work I’ll wish upon a new star *Chorus I don’t know what to do It’s breaking me in two I know I love him But he’s in love with you I don’t know what to say I’ve waited for this day My fantasy’s become reality And I’m letting it slip away Is it real? Or is it an illusion of the heart A false feeling of comfort keeping you both from being apart But I can see your brown eyes are beginning to wander And I like to think this won’t last much longer I’m stronger, while all she can do is throw a fit But is she smarter? It’s her chance and she won’t let go of it I can’t blame her, and I’m sure she’d like to ignore me But she knows we ended the book with an unfinished story You’re the author of my emotions Your pen keeps steady motion And I read without my eyes open Cuz I read with my heart, something she can’t do I could love you forever, and believe me I plan to And I’ll feel this way until the mountains flatten out The way I chase you, it feels like a game of cat and mouse But the world’s a crazy place, we gotta face the facts One day the mice will turn around and chase the cats I guess I’ll have to wait until that day comes Cuz that’ll be a chase I won’t run away from *Chorus I don’t know what to do It’s breaking me in two I know I love him But he’s in love with you I don’t know what to say I’ve waited for this day My fantasy’s become reality And I’m letting it slip away |
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06-05-06, 01:35 AM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4381 3163
not to be one of "those" people....but feed? anyone??
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06-05-06, 11:43 AM
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New to RV
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IP: EA48 FBD7
wuss poppin? this was a nice song, was really feelin the chorus, i liked the second verse betta than the first, the first was still hott tho, keep writin, and hit me up if u wanna do a collab sumtime, one love!
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06-06-06, 06:34 PM
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IP: 2029 97B3
i was really feelin this piece, flow was on point and u had multies to up it as well
"We’re not perfect, but we fit so perfectly" Nice pun "But she knows we ended the book with an unfinished story" Liked the metaphor. i liked the ended where you made the comparison to mountains flattenin and mice chasen cats instead, it helped stress the emotion you had. oh btw "And if I know at all who you are, I haven’t gone too far" i wasnt too sure what that meant; that lines makes it sound like u haven't met that person yet, care to explain? aye overall good piece and a nice drop
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06-06-06, 06:36 PM
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IP: 2029 97B3
i was really feelin this piece, flow was on point and u had multies to up it as well
"We’re not perfect, but we fit so perfectly" Nice pun "But she knows we ended the book with an unfinished story" Liked the metaphor. i liked the ended where you made the comparison to mountains flattenin and mice chasen cats instead, it helped stress the emotion you had. oh btw "And if I know at all who you are, I haven’t gone too far" i wasnt too sure what that meant; that lines makes it sound like u haven't met that person yet, care to explain? aye overall good piece and a nice drop 8/10
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06-06-06, 10:20 PM
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New to RV
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IP: ADC2 2DA3
Quote:
It means, if I truly know who you are, the person inside, then I know my devotion was worth it...I didn't take it too far for someone who wasn't worth it. That was some really good feed, I wish everyone was as thorough as you. Thank you so much. -Krissy edit: THIS IS SKANDALUZ(the original threadstarter)...I DIDN'T REALIZE OUR COMPUTER WAS SIGNED IN UNDER MY FIANCE'S NAME. WE BOTH GO ON THIS SITE AND WE LIVE TOGETHER...OOPS 
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..::You couldn't touch my SkyLL if i wrote lines on my palm and placed my hand on you::..
Battle Wreckord
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.:::~*!*~Line Of Tha Century~*!*~:::...
^-=!~I was checkin' my *reflection*, i'm just as *dope* as *coke on mirrorz*~!=-^ Last edited by AkHiLeEz_SkYLL : 06-06-06 at 10:23 PM. Reason: OOPS! |
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06-08-06, 06:34 PM
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New to RV
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IP: ADC2 2DA3
Jesus Christ.
this shizzzzzzz was dope. skyll = dope. it's obviously something BOTH you and i know. let me show you people what feed is. Quotes. Quote:
these opening lines were hot, i was drawn in. that wave/tide concept was ill, period. Quote:
simple, but still made me smirk Quote:
dope meta. Quote:
these were hot. the last line made me go "ahhhh". good shit. as for the hook, PERFECT. Quote:
very nice Quote:
read without ya' eyes open? hot. real hot. Quote:
mountain line was good. "One day the mice will turn around and chase the cats"<--that line amazed me. the ending was good too. flow - perfect at times, although some lines would be stretched or end to early. multis - your opening lines had multis and they were simple and made sense, but i took the bait and i'm glad. concept - hot. metas - you know what you're doing. nice. vocab - nothing to big, but it didn't need to sound "intelligent". vocab used was best suited for this concept. structure - great, lines were the perfect length. overall - 9/10 keep droppin. -A. Skyll. also. just because this is my fiance`, does NOT mean i'm going to be ALL over her shit and gassing her. trust me, i've told her when something wasn't good. this was a dope drop though. i give credit where it's due. s'all i've ever done.
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..::You couldn't touch my SkyLL if i wrote lines on my palm and placed my hand on you::..
Battle Wreckord
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.:::~*!*~Line Of Tha Century~*!*~:::...
^-=!~I was checkin' my *reflection*, i'm just as *dope* as *coke on mirrorz*~!=-^ Last edited by AkHiLeEz_SkYLL : 06-08-06 at 06:51 PM. Reason: i basically felt like it. |
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