New track from urs truly....tracks Called Dangerous Group ft. crypto...holla ill RTF

Link:
http://www.cryptocreep.com
^^^an plz pause the openin song that comes up on the page that is not my track^^^

Dangerous Group 1st song wit the chicoXL pic next to it...play hi-fi or lo-fi..

Order
1st: ChicoXL
2nd: Crypto
3rd: ChicoXL

RTF links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234412
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235210
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235124

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intro actually kinda sounds funny. i guess ur a dangerous group

ok the first voice does NOT match the concept of the song. i jus think u shoulda came in harder with more aggression. that woulda been a lot better. lyrically first verse is decent. nothing really stood out at all. ur flow is real simple. at least u stay on the beat.

i guess this is the chorus. real boring.

second verse comes in a lot better. sounds much better. the flow is cool. cause it switches up more. more attitude with this guy. i like that. only thing is that it sounds like ur gasping for air.

chorus again is boring

i think this is the same guy as the first verse. adlibs are cool on this verse. emotion is alright. a little better than first verse. dont really get what youre saying in this verse.

chorus again same



overall this was a cool song. nothing that i honestly would listen to. the chorus really jus killed this song i think. but keep puttin out that music.

No doubt good looks on the feed kid...ill RTF on ur tracks

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Okay...beat is str8..not really hot but its str8...

first verse start out kinda annoying. Your a bit off topic and you need to uppin your lyrics a bit. your flow is very simple because you have pauses in between your lines or the next snare drum like if your anticipating the beat rather than just flowing to it naturally. you got to work with this the most. Str8 breath control on the verse but you need to come up with a better concept or if your writing about being a dangerouse group, then you have to get more into it lyrically, and with a more complex flow. your verse gets 5.5/ 10

2nd verse starts decent. this dude has more emotion fitting a beat of this manner. He has breath control problems that he should really work out. His Lyrics are also a bit off topic. This is your main concern IMO, work on your concept, breath control, and staying on topic. Other then that you had a str8 delivery and your voice matched the beat better. 6.5/10

3rd. your more comfterble with the beat but your still coming a bit weak on it. YOu need to still work on your lyrics and find your voice. Not sure what the fuck you are trying to say because you start talking about random weird shit. I know your trying to come with some sick shit but this was just random up and down shit fam. you need to find a topic and get on it. breath control is still str8. 6/10

Overall this track was ok. Terrible hook and no comunication between you guys over the topic and concept. You just basically gave each other a track and said...here....write nigga and just looked at each other to see who could finish first. lol. I never heard anything from you before so for the most part it aint that bad of a track. the quality in my opinion is nice as far as the engineering and shit. dubs and voices are str8. ChicoXL needs to have a better delivery, flow, lyrics and Scrabble just needs better, lyrics and needs to stick to the concept. this track gets a over all score of 5/10

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

Damn lol good lookin out dog..on the feed back

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