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Old 09-20-06, 05:04 PM   #1
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Question Life is Hard

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Dear Lord all I ask is u keep me alive
Cus I'm fightin this battle just tryna survive
Nobody knows da hurt and the heat in my heart
I'm so confused I nen backtracked and dunno where to start
Mama gone and it's a sad story to tell
Tryna keep my head up but the devil tryna persue me to hell
God has been good to me and I gotta tell my story
When mama left this world she told me not to worry
So I keep the faith and still I rise
I've been through it all that's why I'm so wise
I've cried many nights and bled deep inside
Feel like my heart been cut deep long and wide
As I strive I steady rise above I've seen no light
I'm blinded on da way this journey is rocky where can I lay?
I've been put down to da ground stomped on my face
But thorugh it all God put me right back in place
I can say I survived the storm of Life
and you wouldnt ever want to obtain my strife
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Old 09-20-06, 05:23 PM   #2
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oh thats wassup,i was feeling it
but peep this verse out

people say youll grow out of it but ive been through the worst faise
i pray to god everday and it dont seem like church pays
and everyday im reminded of another year of pain on my bithdays

i spit that spiritual stuff too,i dont only spit fire
leave me feedback on mine

heat 4 tha hatas wiley-d
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Old 09-21-06, 02:36 PM   #3
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This is pretty good, slightly basic but with more experience you'll drop better. 6/10.
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Old 09-23-06, 04:15 AM   #4
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yea shit was good jus lil basic i feel ya topic though but we been there done dat or still doin through dat holla back n check lyrical hustla peace ma stay up
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Old 10-04-06, 11:53 PM   #5
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Old 10-05-06, 03:15 PM   #6
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deep still, keep it comin
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Old 10-05-06, 04:43 PM   #7
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it was straight...a lil simple...try to improve on yo vocab...
put some multis in there...and try to put a lil wordplay to spice it up

i could feel this doe...get a betta ender too...

6/10
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Old 10-09-06, 03:30 AM   #8
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now i was expecting this shit ta be kinda mediocre
but it actually wasnt bad at all i actully got inta it
ur vocab was a lil above average...u used some complexity
but u still could use more compliacted words
the more complicated the more educated u sound (as long as it still makes sense)

flow was actually there..i didnt see a problem wit that
so once again pat yourself on the back...

i'd give this bout a 6/10 (woulda rated it higher but its short as hell)
so thats a good score in my book keep it comming

p.s: leave feed on my new piece
its "girls too much of a hassle" lol i just named it anything
holla back wit some feed back girl pc
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