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10-19-03, 01:18 AM | #1 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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"Life" (keystyle)
IP: 0A3D 883F
What up with this, all i hear is people bitch
whining about how there life sucks and shit suck it up, hard times come and go like it or not, gotta move on though forget about the past, that went by so fast think good thoughts, like when we had a blast yes...life sometimes it can be hard it can leave your inner soul scarred we all go through shit, and it sucks i admit but it's no reason to get your wrist's slit you gotta belive that you can achieve this world i'mma never gonna leave till the day i die, till that day i say my goodbye's then i'll be ready to head for that light in da sky there's no reason to die yet, there's just no point live your life to the fullest, and don't disapoint god created life to live...not for you to take away sooner or later, i'll see y'all in heaven someday but not anytime soon, i got a lot of livin to do but until that time comes, i bid you all adieu uppin for somethin T4L Peace! |
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10-19-03, 10:12 AM | #2 | |||||||
Drop Of Genius
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Erm i aint sure what to say. This peice was more inspirational than anythin. It sort of gives people a boost when their goin through tough times. Not the best peoce but certainly not the worst. Keep at it.
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10-19-03, 11:09 AM | #3 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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IP: EE90 39CE
pretty good, a lot of inspiration, a good piece but i thnik you could have done better, but good wordplay and flow, andnice peicve to read wen ya feel like givin up...keep it up
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10-19-03, 11:25 AM | #4 | |||||||
Banned 4 biting
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
Try adding some longer lines
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10-19-03, 01:25 PM | #5 | |||||||
GÄÑg§tå Gu®£
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IP: 7ADD 192E
It Was Funny! And Good Too
Like red dragon said try makin it longer! Werd
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10-19-03, 02:48 PM | #6 | |||||||
Banned 4 biting
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IP: 8F25 FB35
you mean word right?
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10-19-03, 04:07 PM | #7 | |||||||
Drop Of Genius
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Yeah she does
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10-22-03, 03:55 PM | #8 | ||||||
Guest
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IP: 4577 CD9A
this was a pretty straight forward piece, letting ppl know that your sick of they're whinning, sick of hearing their problems, to just leave you alone. but then you change into someone who cares trying to help them put it behind them pushing them to move on in their life. i agree make it longer, but other then that nice piece
~My love~ |
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