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06-17-05, 10:26 PM | #1 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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L.o.v.e.
IP: CBD1 4982
I know that in this love letter, I've started it wrong..
Because your beauty is too immense to explain in a song Or maybe I'm just awe struck, and at a loss for words.. Like my brain was blown out, and left my thoughts on the curb I'm lucky to have you, and I'm even more lucky to know you.. Good or bad i cherish every single moment we go through.. I love you, even though it hurts because i never see you.. It's not enough to be connected at the soul, i wanna be you.. I think about you constantly, Kissing you in my flashblacks.. and whenever i tried to be smooth, i remember gettin laughed at.. It didn't hurt me though, I knew it was because I didn't need to.. I felt everything that you did, if you got cut, i'd bleed too.. and every word you ever said to me, echoes in my memory.. and my love glistens like a heart etched from emery.. I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie.. so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me.. Or atleast I could capture your eyes as the moon hits 'em Exposing your thoughts, wishin we were in my room kissin.. runnin my fingers through your hair, you whisper in my ear "I'm not ready", shh you dont have to speak, we can just lay here.. this is just what I remember, it's been a while since i've seen you.. I remember sayin "I just want your love" you replied with "me too" and Now i'm stuck writin this letter, with no way to send it.. you don't even exist, this whole time i've been pretendin.. I guess if i wrote it, I could feed my craving for unity.. because even the loveless, knows love has no immunity.. But it's okay, I'll seal this up, and lock it way untill I need to.. I guess i'll have to be patient waiting for the day I finally meet you.. links- khatharsis(2x)
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06-17-05, 11:46 PM | #2 | |||
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yo this was nice, nice imagery. showed some excellent emotion. you really placed your words very well. this was orderly and very tidy. it kept me drawn in by the indepth and the strong emotion. this was very nice. keep dropping
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06-19-05, 12:58 PM | #3 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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IP: 7706 EC2A
thanks homie....uppin
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06-19-05, 10:03 PM | #4 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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IP: CBD1 4982
yo this was mad deep......uppin
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06-21-05, 12:23 AM | #5 | |||||||
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I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie..
so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me.. (Favourite bar...Nice!!!) Dope shit...nice concept, keep droppin you remind me of myself the way you write...lol nuff respect son....deUce
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06-21-05, 02:44 AM | #6 | ||||
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work on your shit a little bit. thats all I have to say... but nice job anyways...
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06-23-05, 01:04 PM | #7 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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IP: CBD1 4982
work on my shit...like what nigga
fuck u
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06-23-05, 02:05 PM | #8 | |||
**the council**
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this was a really nice, sweet drop....felt all the emotion you put into it and you came deep with it
I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie.. so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me.. ^^^my fave lines....keep doing it
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06-24-05, 10:28 AM | #9 | |||||
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IP: 0825 899A
This was dope. you set this up nicely, with your words, the imagery was great and the emotion was deep and heartfelt, nice vocabulary as well. I liked the metaphors. your style shined through on this piece,keep it up.1
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06-27-05, 10:10 AM | #10 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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IP: CBD1 4982
dope thanks....
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06-27-05, 12:26 PM | #11 | |||||||
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your set up was very nice... just work on it a little more.. up your vocab some but besides that i was really feeling the concepts behind it and the delievery was above average and thats werd
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06-27-05, 07:10 PM | #12 | ||||
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average what?? blah
thanks 4 the feed tho appreciated
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06-30-05, 11:54 PM | #13 | ||||
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upppppppp and away
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07-01-05, 06:08 PM | #14 | |||
*Murder Was The Case*
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damn you up ur piece alot.
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07-02-05, 11:11 AM | #15 | ||||
everytime i rhyme...
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shut up ho.....
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