ayo man u got mad lyrics and vocab just fix ur structure mayne thats all!!!!!!

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Voted For: CataclyzM-i-C

omfg Problem ur structure is horrible man, u must fix that dude or else u will not have good punches or flow, its a big issue man. Catalyz ur punches werent great but they were enough for the win so V/Catalyz for better punches, flow, and structure

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iight thz's fo tha advice !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

lol wow...u wudda been MURDERED by now...lol 2 bad these ppl dont kno how to explain shyt !

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wow thats awful amn u suck terribly...man.......wow

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^^ lol...i no why u said that...its all good
uppinnnnnnn

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Voted For: CataclyzM-i-C

Cata took this, personals hit him, punches were good.......seemed like Prob was jus puttin words together that rhymed, punches didnt hit and jus need to overall use better punches and step up ya game....good shit though, both was good buh i gota go wit Cata

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Voted For: CataclyzM-i-C

Structure-Cataclyz M-i-c defff... felt the flow better on this one, problem child ur lines were to stretched out man.

Multis-Problem child, cataclyz didnt really have any so easy take for problem child

Punches-Cataclyzm took this one, becuz problem no hate man but ur lines was weak didnt feel them at all....cataclyz was fresh and tighT

Personals-Cataclyz he had more clearer ones that came out to me, problem child up on those

Vocab-None had any vocab at all, biggest word i seee is cincinatti lol and that is a citty....get real guys both you up on vocab fo real

Originality-Cataclyz problem child ur rhymes were weak wasnt original at all...no hate though.......
V/CataclyzM-I-C

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Voted For: CataclyzM-i-C

when it comes to gun fire, ill let ammo fly threw ya/
cus i rip problem children, even that white kid junior
^^no punch in here....0/10
ill hit u in the hip with the guage n let ya whole thigh dangle/
do it like the motion picture..son..i'll use ya bow tie to strangle
^^no punch..you need to start dissin...0/10
you got about as many wins as the cincinatti bangels/
lil nigga dont wanna tangle he knos ill leave his body mangled
^^stop talking about yourself...diss....0/10
if u da problem then u can call me A.I./
this kid needs a str8 eye cuz he raps like a fuckin gay guy
^^too basic...just stating he gay?.....1/10
u aint the real problem so stop hatin on cass/
the hustler wins this battle so get ur tung out his ass
^^how is he hatin on cass wiht that name?....2/10
im from mass, where da hood burns our trash/
u'll ignite asap cuz ur barz is str8 gas
^^no......too basic....2/10
u cud never b me, my barz are 2 fuckin wild/
im sonnin dis child so he mite bite daddys style
^^basic....2/10

Far too basic here.At the starting of the verse...you were bassically talking about yourself.1st bar-you rip children.....2nd bar-you'll bow tie something....3rd bar-leave his body starngled...and when you finnaly did start dissing...you were too basic.You gotta have complexity

im gonna~MURDA~u ya~COWARD~cuz im wanna those
crazy niggaz that rep~BROWARD~//
^^OK...we don't care about what yo rep...0/10
listen CataclyzM-I-C
u bout 2 get rip see sumthing~SLICK~ill bus yo~shit~//
^^no punch....0/10
Dawg u tryin 2 battle me ur really~FUNNY~u look like a fuckin fruity~bunnyz~//
^^basic as fuck.....1/10
cuz im gonna be tha champ so.. u gone~WORSHIP~ME~//
cuz i aint a pussy bitch like u
wit da~HIV~//
^^basic....1/10
like a boss i got yo mamma~on~LOCK~
try fuck wit me i spray ya wit da~GLOCK~//
^^NO punch...1/10
so im jus
gonna end it~RIGHT~HERE~NOW~so ill see u later in tha~STREETS~U FUCKIN~CLOWN~//
^^NO punch...0/10

Ok...first off...structure..fix it.zYou got it all bunched up together in a paragraph.And stop with the "//" and "~".They just make your verse look more newbish.You were self glorifing and being basic worse than the other guy.1st bar-U reppin broward....2nd.-you'll bust on his shit....4th-you the champ and should be worshipped...and a lot more.And the lines that actually dissed were far too basic.

Vote-Cata M-I-C
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^^c'mon.,....don't be a bitch just cause I voted against you..i left feeback for you both...

uppin for the murder of this poor problem child

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^^return the favor please...I don't wanna remove that vote now...

^^^^^ uppin 2 end this ^^^^^

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