^word exactly how i wouldve put it here.not big words just unexpected words its called symantics.it greatly improves your work in all aspects once mastered.

__________________

i enjoyed the first couple para's, but like cali said
your vocab was a little excessive at points, sa'll good thou,
for the most part i was impressed....good job mentalz
keep it up....

__________________

i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
.
.
fake fucks..move on...!

ILL like the planet Andromeda but my romantic thermometer need
Calibrations, flow grace rhymes a showcase a barometer’s creed
Proper like a doctor I prescribe drugs, see jive scrubs but from
A tribe of thugs just shot five slugs and still had to run in the slums
Gunplay every Sunday true church is too much have to preach
To reach cats, heart all broken but like a small token on streets
With a donation in this flow situation like a baby awoken from sleep
Look in my bill fold ill and bold then pay whack rent after sacrament
Some cats sad and very phony like a bad ceremony your facts are bent

uppin..................

__________________

i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
.
.
fake fucks..move on...!

Thanks for all the feedback fellas. Was hopin' for a nomination, but who doesnt? Appreciate it though, none the less.

__________________
Blow It - Topical

Uppin' the Piece. Thanks for the feed.

__________________
Blow It - Topical

Last time i'm uppin' this, just want to give it a chance to be seen again.

All Feed will get returned & if you need feed on something PM me & i'lltake some time to do it.

Peace.

__________________
Blow It - Topical

New link to feed for bumping threads: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2607331

__________________
Blow It - Topical

ok i'll take the time out of my day to do this .

This piece was very good.. very intriguing and complex. Your vocabulary was marvelous man. Very complex, maybe a bit to much for some but this was a good topic to have complexity with. Your imagery and emotion.. ahh the imagery. Very descriptive here man. Good mental picture running thourgh during this whole piece. Your emotion was heart felt.... Not as big on the emotion here as i was the imagery but I felt it. Your structure was on point and almost faultless..

Anything I left out.. sorry... good piece and keep writing homey..

__________________

- Chryme Syndicate -

so
- S T F U -

Uppin the old b/c the new sucks.

__________________
Blow It - Topical

the was a very nice peace man..great vocabulary n flow..keep it up

__________________

Valid Rap$

good peice..topic was interesting and creative..
nice imagery throughout and vocab..
nice vocab usage..good rhymes and good flow..
overall this was good

this was a real good drop man hall of fame shit here mayne...really liking the emotion and voacb in here and depth of story telling real good keep it up mentalz.

RTF on the OM's in my sig please

__________________