Some mello storytellin right here,check it out.........

WillNova=Blue::Star=Red

"Brake Up....Make Up"

I cared for u, even makin good figures//
and u hoin around messin wit these clown niggas//

Spendin to much time on that job
Then left me in the house quick to roll wit ya mob//

just stop, I ain't never hurt u, u must be crazed//
my job paid fo ya clothes, my sex left u amazed//

Yeah it was good for the time beenin
But I wanted something more,so I started creeping//

jus like u, u stay pushin my buttons//
fuck frontin, u mean our love meant nuttin//

Guess not,you wasn't giving what I need
So I fucked with ya cuz!He was understanding me//

he don't love u, he fucked u jus to get at me//
u fell fo it, the hell wit it, take ya stuff and leave//

Wait baby!I think we can work this all out
Never had nobody that can make say they whole name in a shout//

too late fo apologizes, shoulda thought that before//
u a whore, fuck my cuz, no need to show u to the door//

Baby you know you love me,who greater do you Adore?
What the fuck?How could you call me a whore?//

are u sure? If u luv me then why did you cheat//
ya excuses are weak, I guess u can't change a freak//

Well if you gave me dick when I wanted,I wouldn't have been committed of this crime
But you too busy on the grind,when I wanted the concentration of ya mind//

I'm sorry I was so blind, I just try to give u the best//
I was so worried about the money, I forgot about the sex//

Glad that you see,but it ain't just that,I wanna spend time with cha
When the last time do you remember us ever taking a picture//

I feel ya, startin now, it jus me and u//
cheat again were thru, I'll lose all trust in u//

Alright then,this how I want it to be
Now we understanding each other...good future I see//

i like to thank my gurl Star fo doing this collab wit me, madd luv... now we want sum feedback to see wat ya think

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pretty good collabo u both did a good job hope if da relationship real though works out keep postin peep me out holla back im in open mic n 2 open battles peace

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NICE PEICE..

original.. good rhymes
now i feel like taking this idea...

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goodlook for the feedback raw killa and Xentrix, we appriciate it, hahahaha, naw the relationships not real.... but it could be....

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Nice stuff,like the way it goes back and forth...good emotion,vocab was basic but thats kool! Nice collab...

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Uppin 4 peeps to peep

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nice shit dawg. The only thing I think you could've done a lil bit better with is the rhyme structure. But what can I say homie? You did ya thing! Mad props dawg! Peep my battle

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