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09-09-05, 01:05 AM
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Lifes A Bitch
IP: 0AE0 3B1A
BoneCollector
Lifes a bitch...things happen that you dont want to.. People tell you things but..you just hope its untrue... Ina split second your life can change at a blink of an eye When people wish bad on u & leave u hung out to dry I remember my cousin drew...wish he was here till this day I remember all the things we did but now it just fades away My little cousin Jon was only 10 when his life was taken from me Crip'n aint easy thats what he said,i just tell myself his soul was set free Jarrett my nucca from way bacc,Why'd you have to rob that house Then.....steal that car.....And merk that spouse.. As for me...i was jumped when i was 13 ,lost my chain and ring.. I told my nucca's to squad up..and leave not one living thing.. Loading our rachets we fired at the opposing crew like goin to war I saw the guy's who had jumped....me layin on the floor.. I loaded my gun and fired letting all my anger out on them.. As the concret squares.........turned into blood red gems... I ask my self was it all worth it ? As i sit behind bars...? All this just leaves deep imaginary scars.. Hook Lifes a bitch what can i say?... Just to take it day by day... Everyone knows life is hard.. But never be taken off guard... Spray-Paint I should…be taking all the revenge and retribution, Devise a plan to exterminate all the mental pollution, There’s no time for disillusion, only a lifespan worth of exploring, Rather be finding the secrets than opening chests and leave blood pouring, Continue enduring, till I find the answer and start curing, Myself and everything, fix destiny, and answer death’s luring, Where would I be? Provoking thoughts might put me in the cemetery, Maybe I’m supposed to be there, easy to get shot by an adversary, Random deaths, unnamed bodies in the mortuary, Girls getting pregnant more times than they can carry, Babies growing up not knowing the face of their daddy, Asking themselves the same damn questions, growing up to getting fucked up like Stanley, So I’m writing a letter to god asking him these questions, Its time I pulled up my boots and stopped this questing, please I’m requesting. Hook x2 Lifes a bitch what can i say?... Just to take it day by day... Everyone knows life is hard.. But never be taken off guard...
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09-09-05, 01:08 AM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207505
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207457
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09-09-05, 01:58 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Bump this can i get some feedback...
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09-11-05, 01:38 AM
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IP: 76FD 3C28
I really like it.Was some deep shit. Id work on the hook but maybe it'd sound better wit a beat.My Fav lines by bone was
"My little cousin Jon was only 10 when his life was taken from me Crip'n aint easy thats what he said,i just tell myself his soul was set free Jarrett my nucca from way bacc,Why'd you have to rob that house Then.....steal that car.....And merk that spouse.." I was feelin that shit it had a real vibe to that shit I loved the way paint flow when he rap so I loved the whole muthafuckin verse "Rather be finding the secrets than opening chests and leave blood pouring, Continue enduring, till I find the answer and start curing," "Where would I be? Provoking thoughts might put me in the cemetery, Maybe I’m supposed to be there, easy to get shot by an adversary, Random deaths, unnamed bodies in the mortuary, Girls getting pregnant more times than they can carry," I LOved that shit You 2 need to do more shit
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09-11-05, 01:21 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
I agree the hook kind of messed up the whole song. Other than that it was good, you had some good vocab in here. Than your strucure was decent you had a few strechted lines here and there that messd up the flow so work on that but overall this was a good piece
please leave return the favor http://community.rapverse.com/showt...120#post2431120 Last edited by Justice : 09-11-05 at 01:31 PM. |
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09-11-05, 03:21 PM
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IP: 59A2 1C71
Life's A Bitch, son.. meh, pretty decent
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09-11-05, 10:34 PM
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B.I.G.
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IP: 7D8B DD8E
"I should…be taking all the revenge and retribution,
Devise a plan to exterminate all the mental pollution" ^^^^haha "I loaded my gun and fired letting all my anger out on them.. As the concret squares.........turned into blood red gems... I ask my self was it all worth it ? As i sit behind bars...? All this just leaves deep imaginary scars.." ^^^ much like my track with showdown lol
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09-12-05, 09:17 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Thaks upping for some more feedback
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09-18-05, 08:02 PM
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Bringin The Rukas
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IP: 3240 794D
good i liked it it would sound betta wit a beat liked the flow
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09-19-05, 10:11 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Bump this.....wats really good?
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09-20-05, 04:08 AM
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IP: CE10 8C0C
pretty decent drop......i felt BC had more emotion than Spray but its strait......hook was aiight not too bad.....structure was aiight...flow was off at points but it was a pretty good read...keep it up fam......and rtf .....links in sig
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09-20-05, 09:47 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Word upping for some more feedback
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09-21-05, 06:05 AM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: D35B 3F85
Nice drop, I think BC came a little better of the two. Nice little hook you had goin, too. I'll reply more in-depth tonight, i'm running out of time right now. :|
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09-22-05, 07:06 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Bump this.................
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