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12-10-05, 01:40 AM | #1 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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C.S. Crew Collab. Dec. 05'
IP: CCF3 0222
The Pendulum Swing
Atticus Its...nothing, all my fucking emotions fall dry, eyes lit of fires sit expired to a broken cry. Living this drift of a life, just, kissing a knife, slit by depression...blades lips ripping a site. Everyday consistence dancing an instant away... wasting in sorrow, hallow...nothing more than plain. Back and forth teeters the sands last whim, while the hourglass blackens as the pendulum swings. Ill Technique I'm Held Down Brutaly To Truthfully Meet Gravity As My Life Is Manifested Into A Gruesom Reality Placing My Vision Through The Eyes Of A Barrel For I Cock It Back And Watch The Hollow Tip Settle And My Last Seconds Set In While I'm Wreckin Testin My Medication For Hell's Inn, Were I'm Headin You'd Be As Mad As Me, If You Had The Key To Open Doors To Have A Life Half As Bad As Me Cuase I'm With Satan Contemplatin' This Day And The Other Line Rings, It's God on Two Way So I'll Make Sure You Hear Me Now As Life Rings Bring A Sudden Death As The Pendilum Swings NaRc-UzI Supplying vivid emotions with every message in my arsenal Precious moments are rienforced By the almighty powerfull Darkness overlaps the sunshine from portraying its beauty Harvest changing while obtaing my gem Like a saphire ruby Heartless ideas are swayed by The swinging of the pendulum Artist hypnotized by The brightness of the magnified spectrum Mezmorised by the polygons that are falling on my conscience Realized the controlling of life is the cause of all my problems I feel free like cactus but the changes of life defies my status Dying alone cause no one could roam through my apparatus Percived as harmless the way reality keeps my mind hidden The pendulum swing scrapes a bit of hope wich is forbidden The Movement swaying straight foward and back it relates Rythem Vibrates But Change is what it really demonstrates Mystic Chaos Conciously unaware what beholds at my very presence of Commotion Motion to Notion, swinging with pride, & yet with vengence belaying Rappidly swaying, Illusively, back and forth like hung cot's.. Time's not a factor, although the movement staggers at each notch. The speed stops, slowly haulting after day breaks and the moon rises With new surprises vastly improving on speed just what is needs It arises to please the company of every living human being Cant be seeing, now having temtations to quicken the pace To push the Pendelum faster, the time is against life in the race Times a disgrace slowly loosing speed and falling off of the face Of the maps trace, connecting all dots but still the pendelum continues to sway. Chymera Please...sway away. A majesty aged under the thunders of tragedies blame. Wide eyes sustain blunderless paces left to right, then the shutterless cave in. Eye lids link together to kiss in a wink's tether... Letters to the mind find the ink to edit. Gentle hymns settle just then sing before, cut short by a pendulums swing. The wrecking ball falls, its lust dissecting the wings of all freely seen bisecting the hours by excepting. Flowers now wither in there prime, towers down... The hourglass has now bowed over. Over and over the past rounds closer. The last long sands stand to form God; as his fists twist and become the world's clock. Mentalz ..Make note the illusive fluid, as it ripples the canvas stanza.. The tangant phantom grandfather's Tic' inriched bananza ..Include the lucid movement, as it performs to the chords.. Of a life torn in judgement, from the peak down to the shores It wreaks from pores, engrossed readily.. steadily swaying As The Pendulum Swings heavily across the aging painting Staged the blaming, to denounce the compound rash tactics So I'm constantly placing aim at the surrounding clash of fanatics To bad it's static, only to my eyes can I see the rue movement Shrewd and prudent, as I inquire higher and choose to prove it To loose the trueness, my soul subconsciencly adheres the course As remourse is here to hear resort to something more heavenly So brevity heads my leveling, stops to contort a life in shambles Until one by one the candles, remain unlit as they sit in waiting ..Ever changing like my lifes decisions .. forever rearanging..
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12-10-05, 01:41 AM | #2 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: CCF3 0222
Links incoming asap.
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12-10-05, 02:01 AM | #3 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
Dope drop Amanda.
For every feedback this thread gets Willa and Myself will RTF together. 1 for 2, cant beat that!
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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12-10-05, 08:16 AM | #4 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 864E 04EE
Atticus- o0o0o0o0 your drop was decent, had a good powerful source of Emotion. Nothing much to say here, it was too short. Lol.
Ill Technique- Nice wordplay you got there. Decent imaginary. NaRc-UzI- Did not know you do Topical as well, but anyways you had a good source of imaginary and the flow was decent. I liked the way you balanced your vocab. It was complex and Direct. Dang you got the longest feed from me at this point, lol. Mystic- You was all right, you had good source of imaginary in your verse and the vocab was decent. Ok drop on your part. Chymera aka Atticus- Another drop from you huh? Lol ok this was decent drop and this time you had metaphors which I Liked. The imaginary in your drop was good and very portrait. Keep it up. Mentalz- Alright now, you had a good verse in the category of Imaginary. Very well portrait but vivid. Well That’s all the feed I got, But I want ya’ll to know this was a good drop by all of ya’ll the imaginary was decent and Atticus hold onto the Emotion side of this OM and Narc-Uzi Held onto the Imaginary side of this OM. The rest ya’ll was like frontlines in Pawns in Chess, great drop by all of ya’ll. Mentalz Leave feed on my New OM.Link in sig.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* Last edited by .Lola "Kitten" Cruez. II : 12-10-05 at 08:27 AM. |
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12-10-05, 10:00 AM | #5 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
Chymera is Atticus' old account, however the person USING this account right now is NOT Atticus. Therefore we can conclude that they are two seperate peoples at this point.
Thanks for the feed Lola!!! feed inc.
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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12-10-05, 11:03 AM | #6 | |||
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IP: 28AD 5545
This is Peter Quince from Sixshot.com and RM, I've also got an account on Allpoetry.com. But ya, Atticus gave me this account cuz I was to lazy to create one.
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12-10-05, 11:07 AM | #7 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
Haha, loon.....
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Blow It - Topical -=Respect List=-
Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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12-10-05, 11:52 AM | #8 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...399#post2570399
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=216679
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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12-10-05, 12:58 PM | #9 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: BF56 CF93
i will return feed on every feed we get drop a link to an open mic poem song audio battle anything
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12-10-05, 02:00 PM | #10 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 2154 297B
uppin..........
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12-10-05, 03:20 PM | #11 | |||||||
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IP: C8F3 1CBC
Atticus: had nice emotion, content was nice and so was structure, made it for an easy read from where your flow lagged...flow was nice though, mos def an ez read...
fav lines: Living this drift of a life, just, kissing a knife, slit by depression...blades lips ripping a site. Everyday consistence dancing an instant away... wasting in sorrow, hallow...nothing more than plain. Ill Technique: coo wordplay, and flow was nice..content was sick, kept my interest, nice even structure as well made it an easy read fav lines: And My Last Seconds Set In While I'm Wreckin Testin My Medication For Hell's Inn, Were I'm Headin You'd Be As Mad As Me, If You Had The Key To Open Doors To Have A Life Half As Bad As Me ^sick...feelin the hell's inn Uzi: more poetic approach, nasty vocab, sick imagery....coo flow....and structure was sick as well fav lines: Darkness overlaps the sunshine from portraying its beauty Harvest changing while obtaing my gem Like a saphire ruby Heartless ideas are swayed by The swinging of the pendulum Artist hypnotized by The brightness of the magnified spectrum Mezmorised by the polygons that are falling on my conscience ^nasty enough said.... Mystic Chaos: like ur other drop, lines are long, but held an abstract flow, nice read had a load of elements in it, just need to up the rhyme scheme a tad... good shit fav lines: Time's not a factor, although the movement staggers at each notch. The speed stops, slowly haulting after day breaks and the moon rises With new surprises vastly improving on speed just what is needs It arises to please the company of every living human being ^sick, had a nasty image appeal to it Chymera: nice poetry approach, felt the content/imagery in this segement, went well with the others.... Fav lines: wither in there prime, towers down... The hourglass has now bowed over. Over and over the past rounds closer. The last long sands stand to form God; as his fists twist and become the world's clock. ^loved the hourglass line...went very smoothly with the rest of your segment MentalZ: vocab was locked down, flow was sick too....good shit Favlines: It wreaks from pores, engrossed readily.. steadily swaying As The Pendulum Swings heavily across the aging painting Staged the blaming, to denounce the compound rash tactics So I'm constantly placing aim at the surrounding clash of fanatics ^sickkk....enough said....had the flow, and vocab to relay the topic/metaphor very appropriately keep the collabs coming...shit was nice stay up and keep the pens writing `1 |
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12-10-05, 05:45 PM | #12 | |||||
GeNeRaL
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IP: 9607 4CB8
Thanks for the feedback
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12-10-05, 05:53 PM | #13 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 2154 297B
thanks for the feedback dawg.
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12-11-05, 06:24 AM | #14 | |||||
GeNeRaL
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IP: 9607 4CB8
Uppin For More Feedback
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12-11-05, 11:56 AM | #15 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 59C1 E212
Thanks For The Feedback Everyone.................Uppin This.
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