What up with this, all i hear is people bitch
whining about how there life sucks and shit
suck it up, hard times come and go
like it or not, gotta move on though
forget about the past, that went by so fast
think good thoughts, like when we had a blast
yes...life sometimes it can be hard
it can leave your inner soul scarred
we all go through shit, and it sucks i admit
but it's no reason to get your wrist's slit
you gotta belive that you can achieve
this world i'mma never gonna leave
till the day i die, till that day i say my goodbye's
then i'll be ready to head for that light in da sky
there's no reason to die yet, there's just no point
live your life to the fullest, and don't disapoint
god created life to live...not for you to take away
sooner or later, i'll see y'all in heaven someday
but not anytime soon, i got a lot of livin to do
but until that time comes, i bid you all adieu

uppin for somethin
T4L
Peace!

Erm i aint sure what to say. This peice was more inspirational than anythin. It sort of gives people a boost when their goin through tough times. Not the best peoce but certainly not the worst. Keep at it.


Peace!!!

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1940 - 2002

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pretty good, a lot of inspiration, a good piece but i thnik you could have done better, but good wordplay and flow, andnice peicve to read wen ya feel like givin up...keep it up

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The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Try adding some longer lines

It Was Funny! And Good Too

Like red dragon said try makin it longer!

Werd

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you mean word right?

Yeah she does

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect