yo against my own will i stand by my own reflection
when i'm around niggas i get through witout detection
thats why my bro didnt survive and do his good intentionz
havin problems wit the crew and didnt hear from cruel intentionz
my skillz are growing but is my courage still going
right now girls are sick of the way i'm flowing
every day he gets closer but i got to fight it
he doesnt seem to go away and doesnt mind it
the mutha fucka is gettin to me and i'm following it
god tells me i'm with you and will never go away
he's the one i can depend on when that fuckin day comes
i'm gettin so sick and tired of beatin and bustin gums
my life isnt good and it will never fuckin be so clear
every day i wish i would die or fuckin dissapear
i grew up wit a abusive father and mother that couldnt care less
all they did was mallested and played around and step on my neck
i sick of this rap is all i fuckin got and dont forget god

chorus x2
to i'm so confused
always bein abused
to this day still forgottin
i'm one step closer to the edge
you dont seem to go away
but i'm still confused

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yo its not done yet i'm still workin on it but leave some feed back of wut you think
peace

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yo dawg i was feelin but i duno ur improvin i can tel from da otha posts u had but yea good drop doe man, ey man peep dis collabo i jus did wit Raw Killa, iiite man 1 love, keep postin

yeah you are wit my buddy yeah i'll check it
peace

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nice drop dawg wuddup wit cruel intentonz? n e ways nice drop homie keep postin fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life

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he dont reply or nuttin so thats why i put that and nice collab wit em coo shit

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view my shit

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view this shit damn
peace

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view my shit

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What up, I'm new here. 16 year old dude from detroit (my name is sleah david). I'm a poet but I love hip-hop (rap is different but ne way). U had a nice verse, but it seemed a lil unfocused. I just think u would really be killin em wit it if u stuck to the topic more and elaborated on the stuff in the verse and then save somethin else in the first verse for the seconf then elaborate on that. I hope u appreciate my honesty and don't think I'm hating. I'd apprecitate ur's if u read my poem called "higher". It's my first post so I hope u look at it and read the whole thing and give me ur honest opinion. thanx
~Selah~ (think about it)

thanx for your honesty and yes i'll check it

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view this shit plz ppl

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