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12-24-03, 11:39 PM
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[ T h E - s T o R y ]
IP: 66BE 210B
So many words have been unspoken
so much is left unsaid the chapters have been written the pages have been read There will be no happy ending a tragic tale it must be there'll be no kiss to break the spell no magic will set us free What fate brought together our past has torn apart blank pages go unwritten from a story of the heart |
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12-25-03, 12:05 AM
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IP: 5203 B663
its nice work... up the vocab .....
but i like it.... |
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12-29-03, 08:41 PM
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Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
okay this was a very basic, simple poem. and with poems like this theres never much to say on, cos everything can be taken a bit further, structure, vocab, depth, emotion, detail, everything. it was nicely written but its a piece you can take now and build more on top on it. make it that much better.
~Tera~ DONT HATE
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R.I.P to my lost girl
~ Nyla ~ keep singing in heaven |
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12-29-03, 11:05 PM
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IP: CAFA B61A
yea what they said and all that. But I've found that the most basic thing have deep meanings. Yea you could change it but then it wouldn't be yours right. So keep doing what your doing and take my lead and try and elevate cause I'm trying my dang self lol!
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