first u gotta spend-yo-papes/
attend-those-late, sessions in the booth, then-go-rape that demo-tape/
n if it dont work the first time, u gotta reno-vate/
suits-in-suits will start approvin-you if u make those men-go-ape/
gotta play hard, make that nintendo-break/
defend-yo-state n have a true crew, thats what made fifty cent-so-great/
move-swift-n-fast, or MCs will coo-whip-yo-ass, then-yo-break//(you'll)
dont let those punk-asses, dump-classes,rearrange ya game, cuz those dudes get jumped-fastest/
think they untouchable, n end up dead in drunk-crashes/
so have agressive tactics, so when ya flash-it, people need sun-glasses/
cum up wit one-massive, hit that'll become-classic/
but watch ya bak, cuz even at the airport, niggas get guns-past-it/
dont be dumb, drastic, keep a level head, or you'll be sunk-ashes//
to make a true-impact, dont be shootin-bak,unless its verb-a-lly/
keep ya screws-intact, dont be doin-crap, that'll hurt-tha-team/
cuz pers-na-ly, u mite as well go out n yell "PLEASE MUR-DA-ME!"/
it don't matter if u have to work-fa-free/
if ur alert-ya-see, one day u mite have enuff cash to buy a chain, that'll cause ur shirt-ta-freeze//
don't blur-ya-dreams, that means-ya-weak/
i've seen-tha-weak, crumble when they had teams-ta-beat/
got cleand-n-squeekd, gobbled up, cuz they were the lean cuasine-ta-eat//
so always have a hold-a-ya-balls, get on the mic n cause souljas-ta-bawl/
cuz trust, niggas'll turn they bak on you, ova-a-call/
play D like sumone told-ya-ta-ball, n maybe one day ur cd'll b sold-at-tha-mall/
the truth is, yoda-is-small n to get noticed, u gotta explode-n-appaul//
literly,bitterly,riddle me, if u can't make it here,should u move to italy?//
nah-fuck-it,to impress tha-public, up u gotta-suck-it,go fuckin nuts-kid/
wut-is, the bestway to cause rawk-is?//
run up in the record buildin/
tell the A&Rs u met-thur-children, n if they still dont give u a deal....
u bet-ter-kill-dem//

n e body check this out^

decent drop kid, even tho 50 isn't great, but point taken, good multis in here, some similies and meta's also. over alll i give it like 7/9

^ Nice Sig ^

This was an alright drop, and soul is right. 50 aint much when it comes down to it. You had some nice multies in there hommie... Work on your structure though, cause that is really fuckin with your ryhme scheme. So ust even those lines up...
like so...

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... You know what I mean. It was alright, just something average from my point of view. There was only one major problem to me, and that was structure. Showed some potential right here hommie. Keep Elevating...

( RETURN THE FAVOR AND PEEP THE OPEN MIC DROP IN MY SIG PLZ, APPRICIATED )

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lotsa nice multi's man but your flow was a lil choppy found it kinda hard to read, structure needs imporvement to but good content for sure and some impressive vocab. but yea juss work on your structure mostly makes for easier reads. keep droppin peace.

check out mine and Yaz's new collab called "Stories of Old ft. Yaz" and leave som feedback plaz. muchly appreciated thanx in advance.

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Yeah i agree this was a alright drop....structure could have been fixed up a bit, the lines were stretched out, try to shorten them down a bit....you had some nice multies through out the piece, liked that...flow in this was alright, got off at some points though....but keep at it.

2 b honest i thought dis peice was str8 fire.
ya flow was hot an da way ya put ur wordz 2gether
was fresh, it was a more unique style den u see
around here an datz why i like it
peace

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