Why Can't I Be Your Image Of Adolescent Perfection?
Why Can't You Fill My Soul With Neverending Protection?/
I Yearn For Attention And Maybe Just One Glance.../
To Believe In My Abilities And Maybe Earn A Second Chance/
Life To Death With Breathe To Take, Choices To Make/
Demons To Shake, Intellectual Intake, Jus To Get A Handshake
I Forsake For You To Undertake A New Revolution In Music/
Not Rap Nor Rock I Chose To Infuse It/
Used It To Rapidly Actively Bring Notions To Your Head/
Into Something You Enjoy Flowing From What You Read/
Instead You Notice Some Differently Apparent/
Invisibility The Flow Is Incoherently Transparent/
Voices Inside Perform Belligerent Bypasses/
Of Murders That Occured From Influenced Car Crashes/
The Families Lost Links That Are Searched By Authority/
A Young Girl Successful Who Joined Her College Sorrority/
Pam The Girl From Kappa Lappa Phi/
With The Reaper By Her Side She Had No Choice But To Die/
As Her Parents Arrived Looked Her In The Eyes And Prayed To God Up High/
Not Let They're Little Girl Say GoodBye
"Just Stay In Our Life Pam Please Dont Perish"/
A Drunk Driver Took The Life Of Another Soul Cherised/

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It seemed to me that you had a lot of good vocab, I liked the read, but you need to work on the structure it made it a little hard to read, and maybe not capitalizing all of the first letters. Over all it was a pretty good read. Keep at it, you seem to have to potential, now it just takes working at it to put your bar even higher.