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02-02-04, 05:14 PM | #1 | ||||||
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best ryhme ever
IP: FD9D 8A8F
(i fuckin posted this b4)undefined
Hello world, i'm a newbie. This is my first rap on this site. Judge me fairly. And if i sucked tell me why yo my playas and bitches get ready , pull out ya glocks we gonna fight these hatas who still play wit megablocks they standin they're pissin in they pants we gonna squash them like them lil ants then one dude starts to frown, i took his head and smacked it on da ground he gets up and turns around, i punch him once and he fell down i get back in da club get me a few rounds of bub i have 12 rounds of alize waitin 4 my bitch to fuck today we go smoke up an ouce or two i was starting to get cornier then johnny woo so i decided to make a gta and then i get arrested by tha cia now i'm in jail wit my bitch getin blowed now i cant even think about wat she showed she had 1inch winnie, and she was a woman, i ran i got out on bail, now i'm gettin gypsy glasses man MC.MErC |
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02-02-04, 06:51 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: FD9D 8A8F
yo you people why aint fuckin anybody checkin this, don't be hatan if u didn't even take a fuckin look.
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02-02-04, 06:57 PM | #3 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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IP: DDED 50F2
it was alright, vocab was pretty simple, structure, well coulda been better. Try to keep lines the same length for better flow. And just make the whole thing longer and it'll be cool. And don't flip out when ppl don't reply, reply to there's and they will reply to your's
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02-02-04, 07:45 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: FD9D 8A8F
thx for the tip, but i waited a long time and had to post this a second time.
I wanna hear from more peeps |
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02-03-04, 06:08 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: FD9D 8A8F
u people stink
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02-03-04, 06:12 PM | #6 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 6301 79A8
Tips for improvement, pay attention to syllable count in each bar, elevate your vocab, try and get a topic thats not...nothing, and once you get good try to throw in some multi's..
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02-03-04, 06:13 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: C1DA C961
change the title to...Worst rhyme ever....
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02-03-04, 06:16 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: FD9D 8A8F
i only called it best ryhme ever because nobody was payin attention and it was pissin me off well thanks for your comments. And your right it was a bad open mic
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02-03-04, 07:43 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 7733 7AF9
lol at the ending
it was funny at least |
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