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02-15-04, 04:51 PM
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Alone in a Room
IP: 850B 95B3
At the start of each day it is just me...
Alone in a room. I have no eagle feathers, no honor song has been sung for me and There is no recognition for my caring for the homeless and hungry maybe I am only good at the little things well My life is nothing pretty that is why I hope I can sleep peacefully tonight the bottom line is At the end of the day it is just me... Alone in a room.
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02-15-04, 08:30 PM
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IP: 2A8C 115D
hmm...short yes...but theres somethin to it...
I am only good at the little things that line seems more then appropriate in this...small yess but it still works to portray the meaning...liked the repitition of the alone in the room...draws the piece to a close...
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~â€-LiBeRaTe Me!â€-~
CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
  I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
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02-29-04, 11:31 AM
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IP: 6F95 38F9
u said alot with those few words. great poem. i would change the how u structered it. meaning i would type it up differently but each word was penned perfectly imo
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