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03-25-04, 11:15 PM | #1 | ||||||
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this story is sad but true (need feed back)
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i dont know how its goin to come out but here we go!!!!!
i know a man whos the worlds biggest bum he used to come home and beat his unborn babies mom he done it alot made him feel cool any real man tell you hes a fool then one night he pulled out a knife cut open the mom and try to take the babys life just pause for a minute to feel the pain any man do that hes fuckin insane or has no fuckin brain after the baby was born he left with no trace cuz he was bitch and couldnt look the baby in the face as the years went on and the boy got older mom im goin to find him thats what he told her after 23 yrs he found the man boy could see his moms blood on his hands the farther i go with this fuckin writing the madder i get i wanna start fighting the boy reached in his pants pulled out a gun shot his dad in the leg said lets have some fun the guyed cried out dont know who you are the boy pulled off his shirt you recognize the scar the story i told you is very true if you think im lyin well fuck you this story is for the guy who started this whole mess got a scar on my stomach and one on my chest i see that muthafucker every time i undress undefinedfuck you david you know who this is |
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03-25-04, 11:19 PM | #2 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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it was alright basic rhymes but good story........
one love...... |
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03-26-04, 02:02 AM | #3 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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work on vocab
flow was off a bit in places and thats not a true story
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03-26-04, 08:49 AM | #4 | |||||||
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oh yes it is a true story
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how you gonna tell me that aint true it happened to me it didnt happen to you |
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03-26-04, 10:31 AM | #5 | |||||||
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That story was raw whether it's true or not. But there were no dynamics, multis or anything exciting.....vocab sucked too.
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step up and get merked cuz i take care of bidness/ A killa without witness from the start to the finish/ you're fallin off like you came down with tha sickness/ cuz when you step to tha Phreak I'm gonna leave you dickless HASTA LAVISTA MUTHAFUCKA!!! A-1 Lyricists |
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03-26-04, 01:22 PM | #6 | |||||
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nope didnt happne i tell ya that one right now and your gay and you suck haha
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03-26-04, 02:38 PM | #7 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 525D FF37
let me c no it didnt happen ud b dead
cause hed cut into ur mom and the amniotic fluid would leak out causing u 2 die god i hate stupid lil kids whao post shit without knowin facts lol if its true post a pic of ur scar dumbass
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03-26-04, 02:41 PM | #8 | ||||
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lol @ accomp...nah fah realz man it may somehow make a better audio, but text doesn't do this post any justice whether its true or not.
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03-27-04, 01:08 AM | #9 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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damn ur mom sleeps really hard 2 kid
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03-28-04, 02:40 AM | #10 | ||||
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Alright white...i kind of noticed that you had a few tyte bars...and then the other 70% was lil holes that you broke your leg in...Good topic tru or not, Good 'cuz it encorperated Wordplay...Not bad, Should have taken more time and you need to elevate.
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