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IP: ED60 D851
My mind is constantly at peace
with these conflicting thoughts openly hiding my obvious emotion seemingly calm yet deeply distraught Shouting silently in frustration articulating my unspoken word recieving no rhetorical response were my inaudible visions slurred? My feelings numbed to the touch abjectly refusing to accept reality ethics enter out my clouded mind leaving no distinct definition of morality. Spiralling downward glancing back up trapped in ummoving perpetual motion apologizing for my feigned forgiveness undecidedly commited to partial devotion |
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Hmm... how is your mind at peace, if you are frustrated, numbed, etc?
Anyway, this was ok, didn't do much for me because the structure was just sort of constnant throughout, and you didn't do that much with the topic, which seems a little cliche. A good start, for sure, but you probably want to work more on making it your own.. I just don't really sense much personal here.
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IP: ED60 D851
My mind is constantly at 'peace'
with these 'conflicting thoughts' not peace and Then frustration... peace In frustration. (thus the title) i stayed with the same structure throughout, yes. but the only poems that dont stay structured are freeverse... appreciate the reply, looking for some more |
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keep on tryin this was some what good
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IP: ED60 D851
thanks.
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yawn
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Contradiction... I love it... I live it... Hah. But really nice i like it all. Nothing really bad to say. Nice stuff. And im glad to see another poetry head
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appreciate it.
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i liked this one it stayed true to its title with the contradicting emotions feelings and thoughts i liked this drop stay up
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