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09-11-04, 09:37 PM | #1 | |||||
Houdini
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"Not The one To Confide In"
IP: 0ABC 464B
Dream's Shattered And all the whole world is Fightin'
Notta damn soul beleieves In me, Im not the one to "confide"In' All my life I have been lied to and needed to be hidin' Just to realize, That this mic Is the answer to stop kids committ'n suicide'N All type's Of violence, Emotional physical and the one noone decides'It' If u had a verse and lyrical imagination like me Would u hide it? At first I did',eventually noticing I was the reason Kids quit gettin'violent' Stoppin'Traffic' Noticing noone was doing exactly what I did' Gettin exicted' Guns blastin Shattering glass like loose'panel's I'm a canibal' Rippen' through your lyrics like flesh'The new-hannibal' I know Its unImaginable' But damn Im your worst'Naturalist' Ventin' Coolin off Hit the bag b4 I get the hang of'it Just one crazy kid'Not knowin' who his "real" family'is By blood'yes, But by affiliation' Its the new and improved wreck'manifest' It's a mistake to aim-vest' I destroy you wanna'bes, and murk all the-rest' Hate to be the one to "test" the new'vest'Cuz All I ever wanted to be Loved and get a few'hug's An'I Needa true heart' tender in prosperation' Noone will ever fill this lane'Of'pavement' Cuz'I Needed a friend', N'I Needed' a dream' Always Pictured a hot-lady-2-cream' So' I ended' the strife'3 day's B4 I wanted 2 end'My whole'life' But damn it felt so right' Barrel 2 my head' and I pretendin' 2 "hold"tight'
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09-11-04, 11:51 PM | #2 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3240 794D
Gimme some feed
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09-12-04, 12:22 AM | #3 | ||||
Jumpin' Along
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IP: C56C 93CC
wut up this was a pretty nice ass... drop froma new comer nice job...i really liked your wordplay..and you feelins... your emotions ...were really good..and i liked the way you described your situation..you had some nice structure ...but i think you shouldnt do those ' '' things they make your verse to crampt up..its not a battle verse... but overall nice drop..and keep it up...7.5/10
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09-12-04, 02:33 AM | #4 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3240 794D
Thnx fer feed UPPIN for feedback
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09-12-04, 02:36 AM | #5 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 666C F77E
i was feeling that, u had good wordplay, pretty nice structure, and u really got in touch with the situation, i think this was also good to me because i lost a loved one to suicide. Good shit keep it coming. 9/10
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09-12-04, 02:46 AM | #6 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin for feed'
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09-12-04, 11:25 AM | #7 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3240 794D
Man, notta damn soul gives feed around here.....
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09-12-04, 01:03 PM | #8 | |||
Banned
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IP: 2B83 7A47
shit was hot nice drop good flow and creative was good,
all around not bad... 8.0 V.T * where u been nigga go to the check-ins * |
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09-12-04, 01:12 PM | #9 | |||||||
the medicine man
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IP: A49A 4FF0
dect verse not bad honestly not so good either but good for you for sharing it
i like the title, u can do a hot hook wit it holla at me for the remix LOL |
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09-12-04, 01:39 PM | #10 | |||
Banned
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IP: 2B83 7A47
upp'in this
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09-12-04, 01:50 PM | #11 | |||
-BTR-
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
ay man that was pretty nice.i liked tha whole concept of it and u had some good wordplay. ya flow was alright i think it woulda been better with a hook on it and if u made it a lil longer but overall it was good. 7.5/10
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09-12-04, 11:48 PM | #12 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 0825 899A
uppin 4 feed
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09-13-04, 01:08 AM | #13 | ||||
$Thug Life$
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IP: 3C80 F381
um nice but could use some work... return da favor wit my battles or open mics...
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09-13-04, 09:46 AM | #14 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3F1B 4C86
Uppin 4 feed
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09-13-04, 05:48 PM | #15 | |||||
Houdini
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IP: 3240 794D
gimme sum feed
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