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Old 11-27-04, 03:37 AM   #1
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....Jus testin Lyrix .......
*Breathes in*

Fluently pumping that blood of a slave meant 4 Survival
Yellin out Testimonies as if i was scripturing a Revival
Slowly the Tribulations built up till i couldnt fly Weight
Catz resemblin Muscle Loss victims Purely Light Weights
Blessed with Ability of Lyricisim and now u KnoThat
could get Ugly Like No teeth Havein women and Kodaks
U dont kno anything about livin in the Slums with Bums
Experiencing feens slap boxing over empty bottlez of Rum
If im a Revolutionary i wont be destroyed by my Country
No Needles Transactions will attempt to control or Run Me
Enviormental Issues get miss used and women get Abused
In South Park child dies every show and im supposed 2 Amused
Allow me 2 Constrict the Conflicts to all of the fellow Situations
About young women movein for dollars experiencing Humiliations
on any givin Occasion i could start the Persuasion that im Finished
If i provide Street Wise lies then my Prophecy will never be Diminished

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* wont let my Proverty get the best of me
Unspoken Prodigy 2 this unspoken property
am i the best lyricist ....Quote Possibly.. its Likely*
,,,Understand theres no stoppin Me*

If i was provided with more then 2 eyes then maybe i could
Witness these prostitutes that cry 4 help.. and i Would
Provide the Helpfullness that God sent me here as a Gift
to be considered a Top Lyricist on Everybodys fuckin List
U 2 Egatistical about your weaknesses that i can Expose
Mental Fustrations Inflitrate my Head until pount of Explode
Engraving 10 names on every Hollow tip that i Provide
No one notices the young Black Prophecies Homicide
We need more warriors instead of Rappers and Actors
A shame when children consider 50 cent a role Model Factor
look all the Hatred against the Muslims that Supply the Goods
I consist the Innocense from every Kid that came from the Hoods
cuz i feel i should Deliver the message of Light....If i Could
Speak upon the Ressurection of...Troop..... I would

* wont let my Proverty get the best of me
Unspoken Prodigy 2 this unspoken property
am i the best lyricist ....Quote Possibly.. its Likely*
,,,Understand theres no stoppin Me*


....*Breathes out*
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Old 11-27-04, 03:43 AM   #2
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man this is some dope shit, nice rhyme's good flow.vocab is good.
nice drop.
return the feed.link in my sig
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Old 11-27-04, 03:45 AM   #3
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Troop=Greatness, always hot dawg, keep it up, u hot, hit up da link in ma sig
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Old 11-27-04, 03:52 AM   #4
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4 sho

im tryin 2 improve every drop

thanx 4 supportin
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Old 11-27-04, 04:05 AM   #5
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Umm Work on transitions.

and on Flow kinda............it smooths it out

This looked as a freeverse no complexity and topicless. but i have to say it was good.
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Old 11-27-04, 04:06 AM   #6
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4 sho...uppin 4 more honest feed
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Old 11-27-04, 09:27 AM   #7
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oo-shit this was complex, and still flowed straight, and still had a good topic N all around nice drop, vocab was good N all tight mang...

keep them coming... 8.5 outta 10...
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Old 11-27-04, 09:30 AM   #8
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Aight I Like This Piece Str8 Up................emotions And Nice Flow.......kepe On Droppin Troop.............creativity Was Establish In Ya Verse.............and Vocab

Drop An Feedback In My Om

"diss To This Kid At Skool-smoke"


Yea Drop An Openmic Feedback On That

Thanks

I'll Preciated
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Old 11-27-04, 09:38 AM   #9
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good drop.vocab n flow was definately there.9/10.keep em comin'
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Old 11-27-04, 10:16 AM   #10
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4 sho...Uppin 4 more feedback
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Old 11-27-04, 10:29 AM   #11
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nice drop man good emotions
nice flow overall 9/10
keep em comin
Fluently pumping that blood of a slave meant 4 Survival
Yellin out Testimonies as if i was scripturing a Revival
Slowly the Tribulations built up till i couldnt fly Weight
Catz resemblin Muscle Loss victims Purely Light Weights
that was hott man im new to this shyt so hit me up and feed
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=162383
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Old 11-27-04, 03:51 PM   #12
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4 sho ,,thanx 4 the feed
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Old 11-27-04, 03:54 PM   #13
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good drop.... i like that shit
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Old 11-27-04, 04:14 PM   #14
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Old 11-28-04, 02:07 AM   #15
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