Battle Rules:

8-10 lines

No Gay Votes (Sorry Q)
Recycling all u want
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

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BlackDeathDB has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-05-05 10:11 PM.

This boys a joke, bad lyrics you know its him
his blimp is broke*, like a bad show on Nickelodeon
Matter fact, hes missing his best friend
a bad act, atleast we know where keenan and kel went**
Hes from the illstate and his name is kelsick
at this rate, people are dead cause he sucked dick
I gotta kill him quick, just one more dead prick
i'm burning him out like wicks, doing this shit for kicks
We know i'm putting him to rest, with just one click
Cuz he messed wit the BlackDeath, and his ass got sick

*Nickelodeon's icon is a blimp
** show on Nickelodeon

kelsick39 has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-05-05 10:17 PM.

yo, Death aint sure, he's just curious george
but its a furious gorge, about to leave serious warts*
i know in ur dreams at night, the kel haunts you
i guess BlackDeath is fitting, since nobody wants u**
Wen i punch, all u see is bleedin, a red head
Cuz i'll leave the DB to rest on his Death Bed***
a Peasant a farmer, wat ur spittin is pitiful,wageless
its like a life crisis the way ur stuck in the middle ages****

* - the Black Death covers u in these black and purple warts/bruises
** - Black Death is a disease... and nobody wants to get a disease that kills u
*** - DB= Death Bed....... a play on his name and how kelSICK will leave u
**** - the Black Death was only around during the Middle Ages with peasants and it went away during than....

Voted For: kelsick39

Kelsick took this one slightly i think. His personals were better and more thought out it seems. Black's punches were weak in places like the line "at this rate, people are dead cause he sucked dick". He was doin decent until it looks like he lost focus and his punches fell short. one didn't even have a punch "i'm burning him out like wicks, doing this shit for kick". kelsick stayed on point and used his personals well. otherwise the structure was good for both.

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i sed to explain every bar black so that it would be fair...... u lil bitch

my bad here

This boys a joke, bad lyrics you know its him
his blimp is broke*, like a bad show on Nickelodeon
OPENER WAS WEAK, OKAY SET UP BUT PUNCH COULD'VE BEEN BETTER
Matter fact, hes missing his best friend
a bad act, atleast we know where keenan and kel went**
BAD SETUP, PUNCH WAS DECENT
Hes from the illstate and his name is kelsick
at this rate, people are dead cause he sucked dick
SET UP WAS GOOD BUT THE PUNCH WAS BAD
I gotta kill him quick, just one more dead prick
i'm burning him out like wicks, doing this shit for kicks
BAD SET UP, PUNCH WAS BAD (burning em out like wicks was pretty good)
We know i'm putting him to rest, with just one click
Cuz he messed wit the BlackDeath, and his ass got sick
BAD SET UP BUT THE PUNCH LANDED

yo, Death aint sure, he's just curious george
but its a furious gorge, about to leave serious warts*
DECENT SET UP, DECENT PUNCH (with explanation)
i know in ur dreams at night, the kel haunts you
i guess BlackDeath is fitting, since nobody wants u**
WEAK SET UP BUT DECENT PUNCH
Wen i punch, all u see is bleedin, a red head
Cuz i'll leave the DB to rest on his Death Bed***
BAD SETUP BUT PUNCH WAS GOOD DECENT WORDPLAY
a Peasant a farmer, wat ur spittin is pitiful,wageless
its like a life crisis the way ur stuck in the middle ages****
DECENT SET UP WITH A GOOD PUNCH (overall good closer)

that's how i felt you took this one overall. And by the way, since i'm a little bitch i'd just like to point out the fact that you spelled said wrong. Peace

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Voted For: kelsick39

yo, Death aint sure, he's just curious george
but its a furious gorge, about to leave serious warts*
wasnt feeling this...

i know in ur dreams at night, the kel haunts you
i guess BlackDeath is fitting, since nobody wants u**
ok..

Wen i punch, all u see is bleedin, a red head
Cuz i'll leave the DB to rest on his Death Bed***
decent..

a Peasant a farmer, wat ur spittin is pitiful,wageless
its like a life crisis the way ur stuck in the middle ages****

could of been a better ending, flow ok, no hard punches, no multis, but all around decent no played punches at-less just wasnt good hard hitting ones..


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This boys a joke, bad lyrics you know its him
his blimp is broke*, like a bad show on Nickelodeon
decent...

Matter fact, hes missing his best friend
a bad act, atleast we know where keenan and kel went**
ok..

Hes from the illstate and his name is kelsick
at this rate, people are dead cause he sucked dick
no no and no....

I gotta kill him quick, just one more dead prick
i'm burning him out like wicks, doing this shit for kicks
ok..

We know i'm putting him to rest, with just one click
Cuz he messed wit the BlackDeath, and his ass got sick
WTF?? weak ending...

flow ok, no punches, no multis no personal no noting really just flowing and no direct hits that had effect just work on those and u will be better....

ya preety even thou but good battle....

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Voted For: BlackDeathDB

punches-BD
metals-none
persnals-BD
flow-BD
struck-BD
multis-none

kelsick39 came weak as ur did to much explaining
BlackDeathDB came weak but came harder than kelsick

v/BD

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^^^^^ see this is wat i was talkin about........ i sed to BlackDeath that we were suppose to explain EVERY bar so that it would be fair........ so i wouldnt lose votes for makin it seem like i had to explain every bar for u to get it...

ohhhh and sorry mage, wat i sed wasnt aimed at u, lol.

fine we'll just rematch a 3rd time, having every damn line explained....

Voted For: kelsick39

kelsick39 - good drop man. good flow, good good structure, some solid punches and personals. lots of crazy personals acctually. you had a solid closer, probably my favourite line. good wordplay in there. overal nice drop. 7.5/10

BlackDeathDB - good verse aswell. punches weren't as hard though, and you didn't have as many personals. your vocabulary was pretty bland too. good structure and flow, but work on personals and punches and you'll get better. not bad....6/10

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Voted For: BlackDeathDB

kelsick-
i was feeling the nameplay.. you had some creative lines, the opener was decent..
Wen i punch, all u see is bleedin, a red head
Cuz i'll leave the DB to rest on his Death Bed***
a Peasant a farmer, wat ur spittin is pitiful,wageless
its like a life crisis the way ur stuck in the middle ages****
^^Nice bars, aight punches... you had nice flow in these lines. You didn't have many personals but overall your verse was decent.. stop explaining ya punches, it's understood.

BlackDeathDB-
Matter fact, hes missing his best friend
a bad act, atleast we know where keenan and kel went**
nice personal... good job

i was feeling ya personals in your verse..
Hes from the illstate and his name is kelsick
at this rate, people are dead cause he sucked dick
^^nice personal, play on his location wit his name

i wasn't feeling your closer.. but you had some personals good enuff to take this one, in my opinion..

good luck..
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