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Old 04-24-05, 11:12 AM   #1
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"Just A Moment" (Remix) Feat. Kesse

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Written to the "Just a Moment" beat..
So I figured i'd throw the chorus in..



As day comes and night falls
For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all
And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn
While wishin' y'all were home



OneStepBeyond

Through life its struggle, seems difficult to survive,
Result from the lies, and many had to fought for your life,
thought was disguised, the truth, for you to soften the vibe,
Then the truths revealed, which many times was often deprived,
Some sought for a try, because first chance was taken and lost,
maybe its the cost you pay, for takin and breakin ya cross,
Shakin the boss for drugs, guns, sex, and alcohol and killin,
i'd rather you keep it to yourself than involve the children,
now they're all a victim, the future is being destroyed and,
cause father, that house with his wife and kid is being avoided,
And drugs and alcohol are being used just because of enjoyment,
Speakin the truth, i'm speakin to you, don't try and ignore it,
and for those who have been convincted, because they take dope,
Or had it planted on them, being used by the media as a scapegoat,
stay strong, you'll be comin home soon, and that will hit you,
And for anybody whos had my back ands gone... We miss you...


As day comes and night falls
For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all
And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn
While wishin' y'all were home



OneStepBeyond


may we have a moment to pray, for souljahs whos slayed,
some joke and they play, but may we just hope for the day,
for poachers who spray to go and put those toasters away,
i ain't soft, i'm jusy sayin what ya'll to bogus to say,
discrimination... come on everybody knows that its gay,
So i'm hopin today that my dreams won't go floatin away,
i've chosen this way to live, and so i hope and i pray,
that noone will say "his ways a little low don't ya say?"


Kesse

life is a constant storm, all things happenening in flashes
too quickly it passes, tomorrow someone could be spreadin your ashes
you wanna flock with the masses, just dont clip your wings
so snip the strings, maybe one day we all can sip like kings
cause its all in your choices, time doesnt wait patient
its not the other voices that should be decidin your placement
so dont stand in amazement, dont sit with your mind wondering how
cause life is a constant storm...and your moment is thundering now


As day comes and night falls
For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all
And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn
While wishin' y'all were home



Kesse

these are the thoughts of my life, things could change in an instant
still yet to mold fully, everything leaves its own imprint
a soft glint in the horizon, leaving suttle hints of change
everything is colors all around you, but this tint is strange
it takes just a moment, and the whole world is clashing
life flashing...like the ride you're on is suddenly crashing
but you cant keep scratching, cause this can work two ways
you can harness life's fire, or let it go up in a blaze
no light shining through? gotta fight through and beat the craze
you can sit back and watch or be the one the people praise
its degrading, all the people content being blind than stronger
thought is the greatest tool, its amazing what the mind can conquer
dont hold back any longer, its all up to you if you wanna succeed
their your decisions.. dont get caught up on what others believe
so rise from the debris, set your mind free, and appreciate your own scent
so dont tarnish what you got...cause in life, it only takes a moment....


As day comes and night falls
For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all
And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn
While wishin' y'all were home



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Old 04-24-05, 01:44 PM   #2
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wow this was long,...urggh,both came equal in this...
i was feeling some bars, the majority of the verses i
found kinda dragged on a bit(no hate)..
overall it was a decent drop.....6.5/10
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Old 04-24-05, 02:46 PM   #3
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word, it was kinda long eh....haha, kee up
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Old 04-24-05, 03:10 PM   #4
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worrrd, it was kinda long, oh well......uppin, good drop OSB
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Old 04-24-05, 05:15 PM   #5
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uppin...............
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Old 04-24-05, 07:25 PM   #6
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Old 04-24-05, 07:44 PM   #7
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Nice wordplay it was a little long but it was tight good visuals and story telling skills
i give it an 8
return the favor on the open mic and the battles i need some feedback also
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Old 04-27-05, 07:33 PM   #8
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Old 04-27-05, 08:40 PM   #9
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It was iight definatley better than your diss Kesse really the only one who got off OSB your shit was too basic but it was coo 7/10
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Old 04-27-05, 09:08 PM   #10
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Drop A Link Or This Will Be Closed

About the peice.. this was an okay piece
Nice job to both , you both had
nice emotions , and good imagery...
Both had some nice feeling in there drop
Nice drop Kesse... you had lots of emotions..
good feeling .. your wordplay was blah, elevate alittle on that
One , nice drop you had some nice emotions,
overall keep it up both , ..nice topic,
both did a nice job, just elevate on wordplay, and vocab,
and try use alittle more feeling , in your drop
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Old 04-27-05, 09:21 PM   #11
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where it says My Feedback.... in the original post...
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Old 04-28-05, 04:44 PM   #12
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this was pretty good, prolly coulda been cut down a lil bit tho. good imagery from both, kesse came pretty hard on this joint, i was feelin his verse alot. OSB had a nice flow and god consistency throughout the piece. this is a overall nice piece i give it a 8/10 keep doin ya thing.
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Old 04-28-05, 07:42 PM   #13
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thank you ...
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Old 04-30-05, 12:31 PM   #14
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This was ight, but me and TG's just a moment was better. Ya'll onestepbehind us...maybe 2 or 3 steps, cause we did this about a month and a half ago...but still, this was a nice piece, it just didnt flow that well to me.,....


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Old 04-30-05, 06:49 PM   #15
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uppin this joint ...................................
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