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05-04-05, 11:45 PM
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B.I.G.
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The Liberation
IP: 7D8B DD8E
I make the movement, make the call, make army rise
join my world, if you wanna stay alive take my advice Be careful, there's only one chance, u gotta be wise only one team will rule, only one will get the last slice pick up your guns, c'mon get up nigga don't fall load that nine, nigga now get ready to rock n' roll Known California to Miami, Rule Nevada to New York this ain't nuttin old, these is a brand new work no math knowledge, no Napoleon or Revolutions shit this is only rhyme, flow, structure and arrange ur spit I know, I know, I've always gotta miss sumthin cuz niggaz on here think they da only ones stuntin I'm the start of a new hip hop culture generation we all prisioners in this city, is time for liberation I still don't think wazzup with my life, fuck it get high, fuck bitches, drop in sites, get lucky I now can imagine a bran new bling bling, mine's fake 30 dollars right outside of Disneyland, piece of cake I don't know my style, fuck bitches I only care bout 24's maybe later I'll be changin and I'll be likin hoes Escalade, money, bling bling I want it all like warren G I'm a fuckin bad influence, anyway gorw to be like me hahahahaha....
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05-04-05, 11:47 PM
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IP: 7D8B DD8E
rate plz!!!!!!!!
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05-04-05, 11:48 PM
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leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 79B1 EDD4
link,^^^^^^^^^, i will edit in feedback...ax..lol(this is what i mean)
. heres a tip, you can edit your post,...like i just did... . break down.. I make the movement, make the call, make army rise join my world, if you wanna stay alive take my advice ^^use of multis would help your flow out alot Be careful, there's only one chance, u gotta be wise only one team will rule, only one will get the last slice ^^worded funny, try to make it fluent...easy to spit pick up your guns, c'mon get up nigga don't fall load that nine, nigga now get ready to rock n' roll ^^forced rhyme scheme.....right here............^^ Known California to Miami, Rule Nevada to New York this ain't nuttin old, these is a brand new work ^^syllable counts a lil off on this 2nd line no math knowledge, no Napoleon or Revolutions shit this is only rhyme, flow, structure and arrange ur spit ^^hmm, choppy bars, it doesnt flow well I know, I know, I've always gotta miss sumthin cuz niggaz on here think they da only ones stuntin ^^??..ok,......stunt=bad...you just dissed yaself? I'm the start of a new hip hop culture generation we all prisioners in this city, is time for liberation ^^should work on your punctuation, I still don't think wazzup with my life, fuck it get high, fuck bitches, drop in sites, get lucky ^^way forced ryhme but it flowed ok... I now can imagine a bran new bling bling, mine's fake 30 dollars right outside of Disneyland, piece of cake ^^lol,....really, i still dont kno why ya dissin yaself ax I don't know my style, fuck bitches I only care bout 24's maybe later I'll be changin and I'll be likin hoes(whores) ^^just put that in there.,ulternate wording can help your ryhme scheme and flow out, good example right there^ Escalade, money, bling bling I want it all like warren G I'm a fuckin bad influence, anyway gorw to be like me ^^not a good closer, it had no real content, but sa'll good . . your elevated a little since ya last drop i left feed on.... your structures gotten better, as has your vocab.. but your still not putting good content in your verses get away from the gun shit n gangsta crap, get creative with ya material....you miost definately havta work on your punctuation within a verse...its a key element . no hate but this was wrote like a 12 year old british kid just learning punctuation.......if your are 12 n brit and just learning punctuation....my bad, wasnt tryin to hate...pz . 
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! Last edited by ¤ÐÅž¤ : 05-05-05 at 12:05 AM. |
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05-04-05, 11:50 PM
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IP: 7D8B DD8E
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189354
dunno what u mean lol
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05-09-05, 06:45 PM
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IP: 7D8B DD8E
but i didn't understood that punctuation shit
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