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Old 05-11-05, 09:39 PM   #1
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Written to "Threat" by Jay-z....

UNTRACEABLE
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OSB


see i told ya'll not to tempt me man
cuz aint nobody rippin this like i can
so tell ya mans to throw up them hands
my plan is to get him open then advance

if i stick to the plan ya man will have a slim to none chance
cuz when i get that chance to advance im gonna alter his stance
the way my footwork moves it might look like im dancin on you
its startin to look like x-mas cuz my 'presence' 'prances' on dudes
but dont compare me to you cuz you aint live what i been through
so compared to you im just a really hairy dude....someone ya cant see
dont ask me to stop the beef between us cuz my trigga finger is ancy
isnt that fancy how my bullets keep you prancing around the streets
got ya tap dancin to the beat of my heat cuz i just cock, pull, and repeat
so before you speak about squashin the beef you better believe me
that its easy for me to keep you bleeding profusely and weeping

see i told ya'll not to tempt me man
cuz aint nobody rippin this like i can
so tell ya mans to throw up them hands
my plan is to get him open then advance

uhh...riddle me this, yall thought you'd b killin me quick?
thats silly as shit, dog i got about a milly in bricks
im really legit, dip before i blow- the- nine- quick
fuck wit me, i'll have the E.R. workin over- time- shifts
nigga, gettin yo ass beat down, was all part of the scheme
you woulda thought i was Ralph Nader, the way i "party wit green"
why you screamin dude?.. trash the mic ya need to lose
or City will drop "shells" on ya top like them Adida's shoes...bitches

see i told ya'll not to tempt me man
cuz aint nobody rippin this like i can
so tell ya mans to throw up them hands
my plan is to get him open then advance

Better yet riddle me that... when then threats are stated,
Will you continue to be wack as fuck or will you get elevated?
Ya see the truth... When the smoke from the shells have faded,
from the basement to the studio, easy to tell whos made it..

the mournin will start now... not true that the laws above,
Ya pourin ya heart out when that .357 makes you fall in love,
Or a .44... shortys know it most definetly open dudes face,
That four five will have you stumblin like a broken shoe lace,
Why they say ABC is easy as 123? but i disagree with guys,
my lyrics ain't in arms reach like ya sleeves were tied,
i believe 123 is easier and now they askin me for lies,
but homie this one carries twos and three four fives...


Feedback I left
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Old 05-11-05, 09:48 PM   #2
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you're a whore........FOR NOT LETIN ME ON THIS! lol..nice shit....yur structure was FUCKED OSB...by your standards lol.....nice shit Trace...the multis made that shit flow like one continual sentence...City...i hate you....CUZ I WASNT ON THIS LOL! you scare me sometimes with yur skills....9/10...[sad]let me on next time....[/sad] lol
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Old 05-11-05, 09:50 PM   #3
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uppin this hot shizzle
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Old 05-11-05, 10:29 PM   #4
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Untraceable: Nigga that flow was killin and damn i felt that shit Ah dat was nice 9.3/10
Bigcity: Nice Rhymeing like da way u stick wit it so sik i like'd it 9.1/10
OSB: Nice as fuck u had little multis like the other but nice i liked it to 9.1/10


good drop nigga's Vote on my battle lol.....
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Old 05-11-05, 10:44 PM   #5
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This was a pretty nice piece..
I was really feelin it one of your best drops..
Your flow was good, your structure
was off alittle , and i think you should work
on lining up your bars, wordplay and vocan ,
were decent felt you should use alittle more complexity..
try to use deeper words, nice imagery , and emotions
going into the peice.. keep it up
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Old 05-11-05, 11:06 PM   #6
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thnaks for the feed famz uppin for more
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Old 05-12-05, 07:28 AM   #7
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uppin.............
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Old 05-12-05, 10:31 AM   #8
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yeah...real talk, dis is one of yall best pieces i've seen from all yall...i was feelin it tha whole way thru...stay up my old NOK fam, lmao *tear*...but 4real...9/10 for dis piece right chea

and if u aint know, dis is Doe Bagz...changed tha name on ya...real talk
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Old 05-12-05, 07:01 PM   #9
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haha i knew it was you....i dont forget famlay ....uppin
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Old 05-12-05, 07:11 PM   #10
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Bonecollector
This was a pretty nice piece..
I was really feelin it one of your best drops..
Your flow was good, your structure
was off alittle , and i think you should work
on lining up your bars, wordplay and vocan ,
were decent felt you should use alittle more complexity..
try to use deeper words, nice imagery , and emotions
going into the peice.. keep it up


Fuck what he talkin this shit was hot!!
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Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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Old 05-12-05, 07:12 PM   #11
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return tha fava...1st link in my sig..."good mornin", its sum new shit fam...peep

real talk
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Old 05-13-05, 12:01 AM   #12
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will do fam .......leave links we RTF (return the feed)
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Old 05-15-05, 01:55 PM   #13
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Old 05-16-05, 03:14 AM   #14
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Old 05-17-05, 04:52 PM   #15
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oh shit i didnt even know this had dropped, but lets get some more feed in here, nah mean
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