yo peep this track!!...eney feedback would be much appreciated!..drop links!!

www.soundclick.com/kaveh7
"What im Missin"

http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...ID=2437114&q=Lo
http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...ID=2437114&q=Hi
http://www.soundclick.com/util/down....cfm?ID=2437114

Lyrics...
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/Lyr...&songid=2437114


Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2158980
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2158980

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This was probly the best track I've heard from you yet, the beat meshed well w/ your voice, I just get caught up on some of your lines, cuz you rush a word or two and it gets tough to stay with you throughout it all... i think if you spent a little more time rehearsing this, it would be a better peice, I know you were going for the emotion and not a crazy flow or anything, but there were spots where it was sloppy and that hurts you... but like I said, probly one of the best tracks I've heard from you, just keep working and droppin that feedback, its appreciated..1

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=190717

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i like the beat nice and slow...nice to see sum1 rappin ova a beat liek this...ur quality is decent..lyrically its above average some nice lines here nad there..second verse ahs got more of a storytellin vibe 2 it...ur flow is on beat a lil rushed n sped up 2 hit the snare in places but its consistent for the most part..im assumin hook came wid beat and its nice, fits ur content well....nice drop homie im dloadin this, defo worth the listen

RTF:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=191300

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thanks for the feed ya'll, ima definatly work on it!..gettin the links now

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beat is coo....... hook is aight..... ur quality is pretty good and flow is aight..... ur song and lyrics kinda reminds me of that "Baby" song by Bow Wow, lyrics are also aight..... this was better than the Feel it In the Air song u dropped in another thread..... overall this song was better than alotta the songs dropped in here, but theres sumthin missin from it before its a real good song..... maybe its cuz ur flow is alil off in a couple spots, but thats nuthin alil rerecordin wont fix...... downloadable

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