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Old 07-30-05, 08:25 PM   #1
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"I'm Back"

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"I'm Back" **new**

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Go to first new post My Problems feat BNF (Exclusive........)
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Yo check this out

New song By Me called "I'm Back"

I just wanted to do this song because I been slackin off for a minute, and people was runnin they mouth like I still can't do wat I do, Cause I fell back................ .............lol

YEAH F'N RIGHT

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Old 07-30-05, 09:07 PM   #2
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beat is raw...got ma head noddin like damn...not feelin tha snoop bar...ya flow is cool..im likin ur voice...delivery is kinda sarcy...a fabulous type vibe to it...i tink ud sound betta..kickin it more aggressively...lyrically nuttin spectacular...quality is crisp...lol @ "movin dat yey in da shower"..nice...hook is kinda catchy i think a layer if random "whattsss...metafo"...would have made it dope...change your flow up mo like u did on 3rd verse...3rd verse was best...pretty solid track...

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Old 07-31-05, 12:09 AM   #3
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good beat... lyrics are alright.."I'm even moving that yey in the shower" lmfao haha nice "Get in mugs like coffee cups".. lol.. Chorus is very catchy, FALL BACK lol... this a really good track, i'd collab with you no doubt...
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Old 07-31-05, 09:09 AM   #4
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Thanx, I'm down to do collabos or anything, just get at me!!!


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Old 07-31-05, 04:05 PM   #5
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Uppin'

Feedback wanted, i'll return the favor
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Old 07-31-05, 05:01 PM   #6
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ive just dropped ma first audio..so im listenin to others stuff now..thought id peep this....

first off the beat is nice....and the quality is excellent...been mixed very well...your presence on the mic was good...real confident....i like how you sound..flow was on point all the way through....the lyrics were hot mayne..some funny lines in there...

overall this track was hot...really enjoyed listenin...i loved the quality too...sounded really professional....hottest ive heard so far..keep doin ya thing...

can you return the favour please...its my first audio drop...thanks..pz

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Old 07-31-05, 07:02 PM   #7
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No doubt, I'll do it when I get home!!

I'm at work!

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Old 07-31-05, 07:08 PM   #8
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1st off...I'd molest this beat


good


ur flow is good

vocals cud be upped a NOTCH...jus one notch


and i like the mixing here

lyrics pretty coo


solid drop


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BUT...the hook is pointless and NOT catchy...I heard it and forgot what it said like 10 seconds later...it didn't hook me
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Old 08-01-05, 12:42 AM   #9
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beats coo i like it..


verse 1 - flow is good.. rhyme scheme nice.. gangsta sheme bleh... no tmy style..

chorus - strait..

verse 2 - ehh more gun play.. its aight..

chorus - strait again..

verse 3 - god damn sun.. moooore gunplay.. i aint feelin it son..


i mean.. songs strait.. but if you talka bout lyrical shit and u include the word :"lyrical" be original na'mean ?.. you cant claim u illand shit with no proof.. self glorification is gettin played bruv.. decent track tho
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Old 08-01-05, 01:29 AM   #10
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ay spucca, i like that shit alot. *listens again* werd, dope shit. holla atcha boy fo a collab sumtime, werd
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Old 08-01-05, 03:24 AM   #11
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Its decent, flow was cool, gangsta talk...self glorification it doesnt have a focus u just reppin yoself most of the time..chorus simplistic clap,fall back,gat etc.. rhyme pattern is easy but overall aite track fam....welcome to rv
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Old 08-01-05, 12:16 PM   #12
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im seein whatup, da beats aigh, ya delievery is good, ya flowin to it nice and shyt
good concepts in ya lyrics, fa sho
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Old 08-01-05, 04:12 PM   #13
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Thanx homie, I feel everybody about that self glorification thing!?
remember, Gangsta sells

anyway

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Old 08-01-05, 04:17 PM   #14
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I actually think its really good. simple flow but perfect delivery. You did it like it wasn't an effort. An thats the key. Make it sound easy.

Definitly Nice Track man.....

Hit up my...."My Minds Lost" thanks.
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Old 08-01-05, 05:07 PM   #15
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1st off beat is aight...plain regalar gangsta beat...vocals are aight...smooth basic flow delivery is aight as well...rhyming is basic mostly same old on gangsta tracks...some nice bars...hook is aight...overall nice track...keep droppin fam

oh P.S LOL @ Phenoix sayin bruv
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