yo here is jus a little sumthin that jus popped off tha top

ayo youll find out fast that my rymes are tha potion
that potion that will shake u fast or in slow motion
im creatin so much damn comotion
bein loyal to tha crew and showin devotion

i dont know what yall think of my skillz
but my rymes are addictive like advil pillz
fuck wit me and your gonna git yourlself killed

my mouth keeps spittin rymes like bullets comin out of a gat
fuck wit me and ill smash on you and make u go SPLAT!

itz jus basically a self-glorification verse but thatz wut i was aimin for...jus holla at me and dont make me wait too long pleez

uppin...wtf i gotta do to git some feedback round herr

dat wuhz ii ma ni99a we gotta collab.....n shyt jus pick tha song iight 1

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i know how to cypher but how do u collab?...ill holla at shya tommorrow cuz i got stuff to do fo school dawg...holla at shya boy

wassup pplz was hood wyt ya'll im new 2.....but wassup???

uppin this shit threw tha damn roof...i need a crew and i need feeback...even if im in a crew and in tha elevation section im still coo wit that...holla at shya boy

uppin again.......................come tha fuck on

uppin...........come on gimme some fuckin feedback

got any battle links, that was aight just too basic, let us know whats good.

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Yeah that was kinda weak. But elevate a little and hit back. Crews are overrated anyway.

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i dont have any battlez...

yo u callin me basic look at tha way u ryme
damn son u need to sit down and take some tyme

think before u spit cuz u bound to git beat
ur gittin butchered by newbies like a piece of fresh meat

wen i look at ur battlez i think twice and then git skepitikul
but wen u see my rymez itz too damn electrical

sendz off so many voltz u git fried
ur unheard of so nobody knows u died

its really simple,jus some little shit but idk how much itll git better...im elevatin right now...wut crew is u in anyway?...hit me bak

^read his sig, livin legends.........you remind me of someone.........not gunna say who.....your punches dont seem to strong....and your vocab needs to be upped than just 2 big words a verse.........keep elevatin dawg

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Hmm that was a bit better but I'll show you a little somethin,
Comin wit metaphors so Pha-reel you'd think I was Frontin,
I see your elevatin a little but not enough give it some time,
I'm like War and Peace, to me you're Gossebumps by R.L. Stein,


quick key lol...somethin like that bruvva lo...Just use creative metaphor and rhyme scheme...you are using VERY basic rhymes...just listen to how the words sound together and it'll work out. lol

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yo thanx alot mayne i really appreciate tha feedback...good lookz