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Old 11-09-05, 03:56 PM   #1
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Blank Night

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Blank Night

A sole snowflake in the midst of a pitch-black sky
Falling
Deeper and deeper
No safety net to catch me
Crossing stars, missing clouds to land on
No trees to provide a resting place

Whoosh

Passing buildings by as the ground seems closer
Than ever before
Is this the end of my endless existence?
Where is my savior?
Where is my prince charming?
Is he too busy fighting dragons?
Or is he not in the mood for a fairytale ending?

Here I float
A naive little snowflake
Pretty to look at but useless
The earth approaches when I suddenly see
A pile of white
Now I have the choice
Keep my pride and die a melting death
Or
Try to be accepted by the others

Falling too fast now I choose
For pride in my life
I rather die happily but alone
Than
To live unhappily within the mass

Here I lay
Awaiting the end
Unless someone picks me up
To appreciate me
As a proud little snowflake

Will you pick me up?




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Old 11-09-05, 05:40 PM   #2
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"Will you pick me up?"...

most def..great poem..i liked this most:

Here I float
A naive little snowflake
Pretty to look at but useless
The earth approaches when I suddenly see
A pile of white
Now I have the choice
Keep my pride and die a melting death

great expression....

can u peep mine and give feedback...Ubiquity

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Old 11-16-05, 03:39 PM   #3
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Old 11-16-05, 03:42 PM   #4
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ill post some feed later but wheres my poem
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Old 11-25-05, 09:11 AM   #5
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