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11-09-05, 03:56 PM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Blank Night
IP: C3AD ADB4
Blank Night
A sole snowflake in the midst of a pitch-black sky Falling Deeper and deeper No safety net to catch me Crossing stars, missing clouds to land on No trees to provide a resting place Whoosh Passing buildings by as the ground seems closer Than ever before Is this the end of my endless existence? Where is my savior? Where is my prince charming? Is he too busy fighting dragons? Or is he not in the mood for a fairytale ending? Here I float A naive little snowflake Pretty to look at but useless The earth approaches when I suddenly see A pile of white Now I have the choice Keep my pride and die a melting death Or Try to be accepted by the others Falling too fast now I choose For pride in my life I rather die happily but alone Than To live unhappily within the mass Here I lay Awaiting the end Unless someone picks me up To appreciate me As a proud little snowflake Will you pick me up? Left feedback to: Day Dreaming... by common Drunk Driving by Valor
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11-09-05, 05:40 PM | #2 | |||||||
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"Will you pick me up?"...
most def..great poem..i liked this most: Here I float A naive little snowflake Pretty to look at but useless The earth approaches when I suddenly see A pile of white Now I have the choice Keep my pride and die a melting death great expression.... can u peep mine and give feedback...Ubiquity Peace
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11-16-05, 03:39 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: C9A2 1C80
^Thank you...I'll return the feed
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11-16-05, 03:42 PM | #4 | |||
Do Re Mi
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ill post some feed later but wheres my poem
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11-25-05, 09:11 AM | #5 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: B32A CB0A
^Awwwww, I'm working on it
Perfection takes time
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