My Thoughts While Roaming....
Escavating For The Truth, Wodering Why I Lay A Few Steps From The Devil's Throne.
Was Never Evil, But My Life's Sequel Has Me Lonely, Only Kickin Several Stones,
While My Vessels Constrict, I Find My Life Supply Indicating My End Is Near.
Investigating Why The Eyes That Guarded Me Would Sell Me To That Which I Fear.
Hustle Me Into The Satan's Mansion And Leave Me Anxious For Answers,
For I'm Now Loosing My Roots To A Disease More Than Victims Of Cancer.
Could It Be A Trade? Well They Say One Man's Misery's Another Man's Rise To Victory.
For I'll Be Another Page In Life, Another Overlooked Human Being In History.
Pick My Thoughts Up As I Come To Conclution, For It's Time To Begin.....
A Journey Trough The Streams Opposite From The Glory Road To Repent My Sins.


My Journey....
Waunder Into Roaming The Depths Of The Earth For A Path Lead By A Dim Light.
Head North With Directions Towards The Top Like A Clocks Hands During Midnight.
With My Courage Empacked In A Cartriage, Move Out To Take A Look At The Carnage,
It Was Never Portrayed Like This, A Monstrosity Compare To That Pictured By Artist.
Stare And Gaze At This Baren Wasteland Ingulged In Balls of Scortching Flames.
Souls Tourtured In Eternal Pain While More Enter In Shipments To This Moarning Plain.
Stay On Course And Force Myself To Climb Aboard The Step Leading To Armmagedon,
For My Vision Was Lost And I Venture Into Unknown Territory, Not Knowin Were I'm Headin'.

Entering His Thone.......
Budge The Doors Into The Devil's Personal Precint, This Demon's Sacred Sactum.
My Skin Bubbles Up Like Boiling Water Under The Steam Of A Heated Hangun.
Hearing A Voices, Making Some Sort Of Trade, A Dangerous Gamble.
A Soul For A Soul, A Life For Life, Two Great Powers Playing A Battle.
A Hostel Situation Withering My Soul From Noticing The Devil's Presence.
Flipped The Pages To My Story To Place The Period On That Last Sentence.
I Figured It Out Too Late, For What I've Heard, No One Else Has Witnessed,
That The Two Biggest Wonders In The World Make Life Just A Business.
For I Know Now I Won't Be On A Vessel To Home, Hell's My New Residence,
And Medicine Won't Settle In The Hell Withing For Medallin, I'm Heaven Sent.....

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2622828

i'll drop my next link on my next post......

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okay, seriously...at least wait till the sapient speech week is over before you post this, don't do this again

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lol, well i wanted to post it so other peeps that don't go into the tourney to look at it and maybe get feedback.........i already dropped on my battle yesterday night.

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uppin this shit for feed since drakel was homo and didn't give any.......

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This was a pretty cool drop..you had alot of emotions and very good feelings in this drop ..your imagery and wordplay was decent it could have been alittle better..your structure was HORRIBLE..it really through me off... keep it up pretty nice job.

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true story ^ bout the emotions
this an overall nice drop cuzz'n
wordplay could use sum work same for structure ..
work on dem multi's 2

keep elevating

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thanks for the feedback yo, not really worried about my multies on topicals.....more on description....

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=220049

Here's One Link............

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This was a nice piece, i really liked the story in it. The emotions were very well done. But the structure was too long for me which i dont really like. The multies need a lil work and the vocab was fine for this. If u had more multies in it the flow would be a lot better. Keep it though, i like ur stuff man. Peace.