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04-04-07, 10:16 PM | #1 | |||||
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IP: A236 45B7
..Chris is back.
n' he writes.. ..gota be some reason I'm not dead..devil must had sent me back ......to do what I do.. yo.. ..I walked into a home for the blind stole sunglass n stared in eyes N' stole some rollerblades stuck em on a guy who was paralyzed I'll spare the wise..the pain of a slow death haunts the minds A taunt implys....nothin at all jus a trick to stomp ya sides I was perched ontop a oak waitin with a sharpened pole to inflict pain the dog was barkin up the wrong tree so I speared it in the rib cage jumped down and wanted half its knowledge so I took a knife n split brain my hits vein, n' everything I writ's game..I'm insane and crazy you tell a joke..I cut myself..why not kill you? na I'm in pain and lazy Na you no I'm not serious, I'd probably toss a propane tank at you wait for you to catch it and shoot it with my nine to spray fire n gas you I'll spray myself with a extinguisher jus for the rush of tryin to save you Then run past your burnin body with a fire blanket to laugh n mame you Bust my teeth wit a tire iron, when they find our ashes can't name two I'll enslave your pets with un-ethical behavior na you know im trickin now this guy ain't gay just when a babe comes he's got hands out dick down a bitch clown, savy for dick I'll rip your tits off hollow em n make a hat leave your fate in tact, toss paint all over your body till ur painted black slaughtered a rabbit for fun..yea remember the fact cuz it shys from funny but its part of my plan..grab a drum n paint it..call me the energizer bunny y does no body love me?..who cares Im hate ful n twisted, jus stuck up I am surrounded by death..I got a canary with just legs..screamin STFU! I'm hateful to hero's..I'm a bitch to of an opponent..the throttle is thicker push it til I can't b stoped,went to a homeless guy, took his bottle a liquor drank it all n' as he watched curiously I smiled..smahsed it on his face I'm lost in this world I'm always gunnin see.. I went to national track meet with glock nine screamin.. WHY YOU RUNNIN FROM MEE!!!... Brraattt Braatttt..*gun shots n screams*... My Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3155422 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3155428
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04-07-07, 02:25 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: AC74 A441
yo i waz feelin this man, consistent wit tha style and sum nice multiz but ya need to step them up a bit man, sum horrorcore shit in there, i used to do a lotta that stuff on tha txt battle scene....... good stuff man..... i liked tha story too.. keep spittin
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04-09-07, 12:18 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: EA63 E645
yeah liked the story, and got good flow. good shit man
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04-09-07, 01:52 PM | #4 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: 3299 9A42
i think it would ok in the begining but then it started to get dumb especially when you said
:"this guy ain't gay just when a babe comes he's got hands out dick down a bitch clown, savy for dick I'll rip your tits off hollow em n make a hat" http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3157044 |
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04-09-07, 09:54 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: 4A3D 46AB
Ah thanks for the feedback, ahh this was just one of those write down whatever dumb thing that comes to my head kind of om's..lol appreciate the feed though
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04-11-07, 07:47 PM | #6 | ||||
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haha shit was funny i liked it....good multis to....8/10
favorite lines- the dog was barkin up the wrong tree so I speared it in the rib cage jumped down and wanted half its knowledge so I took a knife n split brain Na you no I'm not serious, I'd probably toss a propane tank at you wait for you to catch it and shoot it with my nine to spray fire n gas you I'll spray myself with a extinguisher jus for the rush of tryin to save you Then run past your burnin body with a fire blanket to laugh n mame you |
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04-17-07, 02:25 PM | #7 | |||||
don't try.
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IP: D0C8 21DE
Lol thanks for the feed like always..
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04-19-07, 11:18 AM | #8 | |||||
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IP: 3240 794D
The multis were good, the lines were original, but the style wasn't. It seemed really eminemish. I know it's unfair, but that style screams eminem whenever anyone does. The random demented humor thing It was good, maybe if you record it I could refrain from hearing Eminems voice when I hear it. You're good though, I give this like a 7/10 Keep droppin and I'll stalk you.
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04-23-07, 11:48 AM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: 33E3 44D7
to tell tha true you may be one of tha most.... consistant on tha site... nice drop.... I like tha multi's homie... keep doing tha shit
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04-23-07, 11:53 AM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 9465 0DDF
nice little multie action man....
wish you showed up for the league man cus your booted but this here is a nice drop real creative man.
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04-23-07, 10:31 PM | #11 | |||||
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IP: 0825 899A
Yea my bad about that, I couldn't drop cuz I went to FL for spring break. But thanks for the feed...n' yea I like em so if my style seems a bit like him..its cuz I think its funny. lol i have fun writin it..
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04-23-07, 10:33 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 9465 0DDF
well if you want back int the league let me know right now with your word that you'll show up!
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04-27-07, 12:12 AM | #13 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
ahh this was pretty dope. I liked readin it, lol ya had some nice multi's..n the story made it so much better.^you should go back in the league dude.
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