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09-08-07, 06:46 AM
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This is my first post!
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Focusing
IP: E623 A443
I got my TARGETS-IN-DA-CROSS-HAIRS//
Ready to MARK-EM-AND-THEIR-BOSS-ES// When Sadijah "pops" there you "goes", consider yourself "THE-WEASEL"// Don't know how to do it, sit back and watch THE-DIJ-FLOW// But if you take the TYSON~TACTIC, and start BITIN-MY-LYRICS// I'll get ya rap LICENSE~FRACTIONED, so ya homies ears? yep! They SLICIN-TO-HEAR-YA! (get it)// Ya lyrics? WHACK!, like ya RAP, titties were FLAT, how you work at Hooters SELLIN-DEM-KNOCKERS?!// When really, you should work at "Burger King", the way you TELLIN-THEM-WHOPPERS!// Whew! How WAS~SHE? good?! get ya BUD~DEES, to hit ya battles wit MATCHIN-VOTES// Cuz ya ALBUM~IS~WHACK, reviewed by FALCONS~AND~CATS, who use ya CD for a SCRATCHIN-POST!// Don't DISS-MY-SKILLS, yep! drug addict, I did this to GET-MY-PILLS// Now love the drop, cuz you hate me if we battled, I make you choke like ya lips are ZIPLOC-SEALED!// (+-?!) ULTIMA OMEGAS Dij
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09-08-07, 11:19 AM
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IP: 9204 9119
ehhh not bad i give u a 7/10....im just giving my opinion no hate or anything just the way i see it better like this than me lieing to u....anyways....your punches were a little off to me but no doubt i see potential in them...same with your multis.....i see these type of structured written keystyles all the time with the "CAPPED" words and "dashes" threw the multis to decorate....but ehh to me its not really needed to decorate like that unless u doing "quotations"....to have someone think about something....but yeah i think the capped shit and all that decorating gotta go......it messes up your structure kind of....and it reminds me of someone on this site named Fly -E...he types his shit the same way....the styles played to.....no doubt though u got potential.....keep doing what u do this just my feedback......~1~
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243760 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243605 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243609 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243504 ^^^^theres some of my post.....if u can check em out and give me some feed.......im coming with some new shit soon....~1~
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