Quick...10 min freestyle (10 bars)

Alotta timez peeps mistake racism for whites juss hatin on blacks//
but if a kracka's dressed ghetto…they're wearin tha rong slacks?//
Racism iz on both sidez…not juss tha known frat//
Started wit tha whites nd tha colors striked back//
Ion see why we can't accept a person fo who they exact//
As a country, we needa elap, formin 1 undefeatable tap//(clique/crew)
Government ensured us of racial equality…still nothin like that//
Them assclowns fucked us over again…we got 'bitch slapped'//
but that's not tha point…blacks n whites should learn ta live togetha//
In this world it rains, snows n hails…Togetha = no matta tha weatha//

Btw, i'm black...
Gimme some feedback plz
-Thanks

well good topic wack rhyme

iight...we'll see wut others think

you know thats was a nice rhyme to me...it was'nt that deep but you got ya point across.... I feel it....

Wasnt too bad but it will make you a better rapper to rhyme by syllabals instead of shit that just sounds nice.

iight..Thanks fa the feedback nd tha advice

good topic, which is the most important aspect of writing rhymes. but in terms of lyrical content and length it needs improving.

flow there
topic there
content loacked but was worth reading

This joint was o.k., a little basic on the vocabulary. Like man before me said, it's a good topic. Just work on your vocab. Make a little longer too...

coo' drop fam

what u said was true just thro some multies in there next time man u know we got this on lock

Thanks peepz..this wuz just a 10 min key i wrote in science class...it wuz meant ta be "short"

uppin..want more feedback

that shit was weak....and BTW..... im black 2

Yea ok...