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06-04-03, 09:08 PM | #1 | |||||||
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need feedback...
IP: ABE5 5A5C
this was a freestyle i did in "freestyle Cypher"
was just wondering if it is worthy of audio or not... if it sux tell me tho yo, i lyrically spit clips while im up in the cypher yo pass me the weed, dont bother with the lighter cause when i'm spittin.... i spittin fire. im your simplist desire embodied in words wrote yer name in the inscription of larzac, cause its what u deserve watch as my verbs bullets curve and swerve seekin out yer nerves. you think its absurd how a kid from the 'burbs with lyrics only, verbals lonely, could have your intentions curbed thats the power of the learned when my face stern, people discern thier is cause for concern that ima have the whole world "upside-down-turned" im buryin bodies in forests of fern i bring my tongue with me to get the body to burn cause like i said earlier, my words are a flame-inducing germ Last edited by SplitSouL : 06-04-03 at 09:15 PM. |
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06-04-03, 09:33 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: FF98 53B8
This Piece needs work...Elevate
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06-04-03, 10:18 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: CEF5 716F
what do you mean by elevate?
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06-04-03, 10:20 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: CEF5 716F
this one was just seein how evil i could get on a track need feedback on rhymes, rhyme scheme the like
yo im merciless leavin whole hostpitals nurseless fillin the streets of broomfield up with herses borne from the darkest curses brought up in christianity, but now i burn churches my unholy purpose... to watch stomaches bursts's im the worsest I bring whole cultures to they knees i can't murder unless im hearin pitiful plea's i lost my sanity splitsoul tears your essence from your physical have you feelin pain of needles from my voodoo ritual the sickest individual when i leave the scene i let everyone get a visual my audios stay in ya head residual hang ya body above my cup and let the blood trickle ill tickle ya and bring you fame not the way you want it, in the obitiuaries they see ya name my wild style you cant tame its hard to refrain from murderous antics leavin whole citys frantic style reminiscent of psycho-somantic its tragic................. lol that wasn't the best but i had those rhymes in my head for a while ima work on it, just wanted feedback on the rhymes and how fast/slow the beat should be |
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