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Old 06-13-03, 06:58 PM   #1
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what up?

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what up? what yall think?


Half the time people talk i dont listen/
because these drugs got me in an unnatural position/
they got me wishin/
theat i can just stay here because i hate the brutality/
of reality/
got me wantin ta stay in a drug prone imortality/
and its sad/
this world got me goin mad/
but im not one of these kids that can just blame it on mom and dad/
i just do it cause i like it/
and i cant fight it/
i know its wrong but i do it despite it/
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Old 06-13-03, 11:47 PM   #2
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try to make ur lines same syllables it sounds better
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Old 06-14-03, 01:53 AM   #3
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make it flow. instead of the way you had it with

one line//
another that rhymed like this//
then//
this sorta stuff//

make it//
like this//
get what//
im sayin?//
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