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07-22-03, 11:32 AM | #1 | ||||||
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True Story This Day Marks Another Year Of Pain For Me
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Past life-surpass strife- i sit amass night-and fast write-
my last rights-sealed with my class blood type- the stryfe-of having nothing left isnt right- so i resite-the only decisionin irony and plite- dear mother dont cry in pain-just sustain- it's not your fault ....maintaint- though i couldnt ...as i sit slit with razor to my veign- this pain-release as my tears rain- they mix with agony as my body drain- im taken the weak way out-but this route- is the first decision i made with no doubt- as i bleed i hear the last words from her mouth- ' 'you did this it's your fault''- before she stormed out in the storm i felt a jault- to stop her but my ignorance placed me to a hault- saw the car pull ouTside-then saw it pulled aside-on its' side- i held her in nervous arms and watched her die- the drunk murderer still in his ride.still questioning why? im questioning how? to a god that didnt exsist and i was denied- screaming out loud-to the croud- within my tear infested shroud-and dark cloud- apologizen please wake up....nah nah she aint no wake up- dont do this- dont leave me like this as i recall i see that pain pour from my wrist- feeling faint-body covered in distaint paint-the taint- in me once to curse my life in ink but i fear time runs late- i have to....i aint got the strength to- HA! i'll prove it to you- SEE ! SEE ? see what did i do?I see you- screamin it's to soon- "CLEAR" this spells doom- "CLEAR,we're loosing his pulse" i can taste my angels perfume- as i am consumed- to touch her as she nods her head i wake up in an emergancy room- hospitol I.V.S- god why me? why keep me alive? why is it not i why couldnt she survive? it's been 2 years to this day- not one nights that it doesbt replay- not once do i say- why not me i swear life is so dark it's been that long since i seen the break of day- REST IN PEACE JULIA I LOVE YOU ALWAYS. 1979-2001 Last edited by WORD~PERFECT : 07-22-03 at 12:05 PM. |
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07-22-03, 11:54 AM | #2 | |||||||
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this was some deep shit
likin this man pain is agony and agony is life as we know it |
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07-22-03, 04:52 PM | #3 | |||||||
The sYcKlE Makes Me Do It
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dont sleep on this katz shit
this was nice and deep |
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07-22-03, 05:08 PM | #4 | |||||||
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deeeeeep.... this is like the only deep piece I seen you write b4, sorry dude... I was liking the concept of story/ narration.. kinda like eminem's KIM.. imagery was good, and you got a message across... peace dawg..
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07-22-03, 05:09 PM | #5 | |||||||
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holy shit that was some good stuff i was feelin this
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07-23-03, 08:05 AM | #6 | ||||||
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THNK YOU BUT THIS STORY IS TRUE 2 YRS AGO MY WIFE WAS AND 4 KIDS WAS KILLED IN A CAR ACCIDENT.THEY WERE HIT BY A DRUNK DRIVER
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07-23-03, 08:18 AM | #7 | |||||||
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Yes indeed a good read man. I liked it all. Very deep and a lot of agony and pain put into this drop. It was well written and put together. It had nice multis in it too, that added a little pazazz to it. lol
Keep doin' your thing man, good work here. Later, peace. -1-
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07-23-03, 02:00 PM | #8 | ||||||
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THNKS
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07-25-03, 09:23 AM | #9 | ||||||
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UPPIN
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07-25-03, 10:16 PM | #10 | ||||||
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uppin
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07-25-03, 10:39 PM | #11 | ||||||
^WE's Leader^...Dope Huh?
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wow that was hard to read wit out keepin a tear down..that really is deep word....sad stuff..sorry bout ur wife and kids ..
really good stuff though... |
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