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Old 09-23-03, 09:06 AM   #1
Skibadee
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Sarah i know you dont go on here but this is for you.
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As you got off the train i couldn't believe my eyes ~
You were so Beautiful like an angel in disguise ~
I couldn't stop thinkin about you all the way home ~
but its ok coz you were with me so i wasn't alone ~
the night out was good, but the first kiss was amazin ~
it felt like a raging fire, and my heart was blazin ~
when we got home, to bed, an you went to sleep ~
I laid there for hours lookin at you, hours i want to keep ~
then i fell asleep, my brain filled with an amazing view ~
a view that'l never be erased, it was a view of you ~
we laid there all night and right throughout the day ~
just talking but there was somethin i wanted to say ~
i wanted to tell you how much i like you but i think you knew ~
i was afraid that i felt this way, you didn't feel the way i do ~
We spoke yesterday an i got it all out, you know how i feel ~
im writing this now so people know that my feelings are real ~
i asked a question, if you wanna stay friends or wot d'ya wanna do ~
you said you'd love to start seeing me, an now i all i want to say is.... thank you ~
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Old 09-23-03, 10:29 AM   #2
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A peace from the heart good most of the time. I felt you and i was able to feel how you feel. I can relate, such a feeling is so great. Nice peice, peace out
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Old 09-23-03, 11:56 AM   #3
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yeah i thought it was a good topic, the ending was nice, and i think the point your trying to get across is there, but i just wasnt feeling it, no hate or anything, just my opinion, i'm sure that if Sarah read it she'd love you for it! Keep Writing!

peace and love
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Old 09-23-03, 02:32 PM   #4
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yo nice piece, I can definitely relate to it, since me and my gurl were in a similar situation when we just started dating

when we got home, to bed, an you went to sleep ~
I laid there for hours lookin at you, hours i want to keep

^^^yo that was felt... know what ya mean
nice piece, straight from the heart, just honest feelings.
keep droppin, gud luck with ya gurl

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Old 09-30-03, 08:20 AM   #5
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Thanx for the feedback ...

uppin this please ,, .. ,, ... ,,, ..

PzZ ...
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Old 09-30-03, 08:34 AM   #6
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Personal , deep , .....nice flow, .nice sheme.....good piece i liked it

Can u say somthing bout my short note book piece preciated
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