Aight yall i know this aint as good as my past one or two posts, but i wrote this durin school, and i know the flow isnt perfect so whatever, i have nothin to lose by postin this, so check it out, yo, yo

Hook-
My minds a fuckin mystery/
u may have said uve dissed me/
but do u have the balls to come out and claim/
cause when ur beefin wit me nothins the same/

Verse 1-
u better think twic bout what u say to me/
cause when u try to slay me, those comment always stay with me/
and i guarantee i aint the typ to take shit lightly/
but if ur gonna talk shit in spite of me, u better hope u can fight like me/
cause when i throw down theres no goin back/
my fists r packed, and theres no such thing as my losin, thats a fact/
when push goes to shove and i just snap/
ur pretty much trapped, and better except to see flyin caps/
cause i aint afraid to bust out some gats and just let go/
after a few empty clips ull end up bein my ho, cause no one fucks wit this G.I. Joe/

Hook-
my minds a fuckin mystery/
u may have said uve dissed me/
but do u have the balls to come out and claim/
cause when ur beefin wit me nothins the same/

Verse 2-
i love bein kool and tryin to make friends/
but when someone talks shit my joy just descends, my view of them starts to bend/
so if u dont like me or just aint feelin it/
dont start throwin a fit, just leave me alone and keep all ur shit/
if u make one wrong move ur gonna face this nightmare/
cause i aint in the mood to fuck around and stare, but u gettin out alive is gonna be a sight thats rare/
a smart move would be just to leave me alone/
my suggestion to u is to just head home, cause id end up snappin ur bones/
every motherfucker who stirs shit up consider this a warnin/
if u dont follow along fists will be pourin, and to the cat who wants to fight, yea ill floor him/

Hook-
my minds a fuckin mystery/
u may have said uve dissed me/
but do u have the balls to come out and claim/
cause when ur beefin wit me nothins the same/

peace.....

^^^i know its kinda wack, but im goin to my dads this weekend and i dont know how long ill have to write or post, so i thought id post now and get read replies before i go there.

peace.....

well this is the least i can do... u feedback on me all the time (links at bottom)

given what u said 'Aight yall i know this aint as good...' i wont comment on the flow

hook - straight to the point but try to keep the lines around the same syllabal (spelling?) count

1st verse - the multies were exremely basic but better than nothing, the vocab was a little weak...

2nd verse - better one in my opinion

if u make one wrong move ur gonna face this nightmare/
cause i aint in the mood to fuck around and stare, but u gettin out alive is gonna be a sight thats rare/

best lines!!
Slept on...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81616
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81183
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81665

shitty.

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