Topic: I Coalesce a new being

due date: saturday
judging ends: monday

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So We Meet Again Mad Man

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..PS..What Does Coalesce Mean?

co·a·lesce __ (_P_)__Pronunciation Key
intr.v. co·a·lesced, co·a·lesc·ing, co·a·lesc·es

1. To grow together; fuse.
2. To come together so as to form one whole; unite: The rebel units coalesced into one army to fight the invaders

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The night was still young, and it wouldn't end, by far
Bad date, I felt the hate, so I decided to head to JJ's bar
Parked my car, far away, so they wouldn't ask for my keys
Entered and said "Could I get a shot of Bacardi 151 please?
Downed One shot, two shots, three shots, four
Payed the tab, left a tip, and headed for the door
I was disoriented, fuck, I let the door hit me on the way past
Collapsed on the sidewalk, puked, and said "Boy, that was a blast"
I grabbed, for my keys, as I stumbled headfirst into my car
started her up, looked both ways, and thought "Damn this'll be hard"
Driving drunk was never a big thing, it always came to me as an art
I pulled out as slowly as I could, and made sure I ran into nothing parked
I didn't get far, light turned red so quick, no reaction, nothing I could do
Head on collision, I knew right then and there, that I was fuckin screwed
A bad concussion, internalized bleeding, they carted me off from the scene
Took a look at my wallet and ID, and quickly noticed that I was an OD (Organ Donor)
It just so happened that the paramedics daughter, had nearly been killed the night before
The exact same situation I was in, drunk driver ran a red light, and collided with her driver side door
She needed an organ, to save her life, and the paramedic found it fitting
A DUI, to save his daughter's DUI, but I found it side splitting
They took the scenic route, making sure that they saw the flatline
But how fitting that to take my organs, they made it just in time
I died, and my organs were then transplanted to the paramedics kid
And all because I got drunk, and the driving that I did
I lost my life that very night, in an episode of binge drinking
But through that very act I did, I coalesced a new being

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OK im dropping right now...got back from my cousin's state championship game...we lost ...gonna take a shower then drop...im gonna use the word coalesce to mean 'make' or 'create'...

Living Room, Trailer Park, Sitting, Talking With My Girl
We Were All Alone, She Was Willing To Give The World
'I Love You More Then Anything', She Batted Her Pretty Eyes
She Began To Kiss Me Gently, Crotch Began To Rise
Hands Began To Wander, Creep Under Cotton Cloth
I Tried To Get Under, She Gently Pushed Them Off
'Come With Me' She Begged, I Followed The Trail She Lead
Into Another Room, A Place Seen Only In My Head
We Crept Into The Bedroom...Undeniable The Lust
We Made Beautiful Love...And Made A Kid For Both Of Us

Next Month, She Came Over, Her Voice Stunned Dumb
She Wept And Explained To Me, Her Period Had Not Come
'This Cant Be Happening'..I Took Her Arm To Sooth
I Said 'It Dosent Always Turn Out Bad, Ill Always Stay With You'
Her Eyes Glistened With Tears, More Relief Then Love
'Yes' She Agreed 'No More Me And You...Just Us'
Three Months Passed, Her Stomach Began To Fill In
And In Between Working, I Tended To Her Every Whim
Till One Day I Came Home, I Thought It Was A Joke
Two Months Premature, Her Water Has Just Broke

At The Hospital Now...Awaiting The Child And My Future Wife
Pride Is Laced With Bitter Hate..We Have Coalesced A Life
Pacing In Agony Waiting For News With Baited Breath
About The News Of My Girl A Son..About Their Life Or Death
Birth Was Too Premature...Child Had 50% Chance Of Life
And It Looks Like My Future May Not Have My Future Wife
Out Of Spite, I Cry...Praying To God Dont Let This Pass
Give Me A Chance...I Kick The World's Best Dad In The Ass
At First I Thought They Were Doctors...Suddenly I Knew
I Turned Around To Run...Surrounded By Boys In Blue

Cops Have Me Cuffed, This Birth Should Have Been A Dream
If Only I Wasn't Her Uncle...And If Only She Wasn't Fourteen

Uppin

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Holy Shit This Is So Up

wow this was two carzy out looks and had some wierd switches...Finding that no one bothered to judge this i will give my effort...

Mad man...you came nice with alot of word play..Not too complex but simple to the point of a nice easy read..i loved the switch up on the perimedics and it kinda made me wonder...Could this really happen?..over all nice piece...

a2z....you had a nice verse as well i think your piece had really nice flow along with structure....wow the piece was something sad and instantly at the last two lines became sick and disgusting..i loved it..hahha you sick sick man

vote=a2z

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Im Going To Have To Agree With Deacon, I Read Mad Mans
And Was Greatly Impressed, Then Just A2Z's Story , And
Especially The Closer Seals The Victory For Him, I Totally
Did Not See That Coming.

vote -a2z

First off, why did ya'll have to use Coalesce instead of Create or Make? Ya'll could of just went straight to the point but using a basic word, but no, ya'll had to use big words, lol. Anyway, pretty good battle. Mad Man, your verse was good. Descriptive, and stayed on topic, but it had the same concept as John Q. Other than that, good verse. Ass, your verse was pretty good as well. Descriptive, and had the reader focused from start to finish. The ending was sick as fuck though, yet funny as hell. Easy enough to say it caught me off gaurd. Good battle, but Ass gets my vote for bringing a better story, and being a little more descriptive.

SORRY..i like using phrases instead of one worded topics..

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thanx for thwe votes...and akiro...its A-to-z....not ass