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Old 11-22-03, 12:14 AM   #1
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Reps:
2hOt4tV
Supreme
Ghost


Hook:
My flows blazin
Im the lyrkial myrkial
Im amazin
*yea fuck u - change the station*


Im Ill-Matic (Nas) like a famous legend
some of the biggest heads bumpin - my shoulders aint edgin
heres a life lesson:
just keep messin
u gonna feel the best-then...
Cuz its 'All Eyes On Me'
and I aint payin respect, cuz i aint 'Ready to Die'
Battle be 0-1 ~ caught me off wit a weak-diss
The AfterMath - was a belimch-mess
Lethally injected MC's wit poisnois venom
you should see the the death threats i get *pause* shit I send-em
wit a booster-seat I hold my own
and i aint handlin the baby-shit
So maybe-prick,
your best option was to hang-from-my-dick//

Hook:
My flows blazin
Im the lyrkial myrkial
Im amazin
*yea fuck u - change the station*

Some call me grimey, others Loco
get-to-know-yo
Ill leave u more vocal - then a chokehold
This aint played cuz i aint rappin bout teks in my rhymes
read between the-lines
i could - but im not like yall, algebra isnt the only time im carryin-the-nines
The mulities be off the hook-yo
I kidnaped ur rap - and pimped-ur-flow
So that makes u my bitch in rap - ya know?
Call the Popo - cuz i hit u wit a ho
and i aint santa... so it aint-delighful
hit u wit can-of-black-pantha, say goodnight-yo...
I dont play-around
So do me a favor, wen im comin put on a target, and lay-down.

Hook:
My flows blazin
Im the lyrkial myrkial
Im amazin
*yea fuck u - change the station*

fuck tha haters
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Old 11-22-03, 12:24 AM   #2
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upp i peep alot of shit but no one really responds to mine for awhile... someone really critique this
pz
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Old 11-22-03, 12:28 AM   #3
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played...but aight


lmfao, faggot
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Old 11-22-03, 12:33 AM   #4
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lol fuck u... ur shit was played dont come in here and hate cuz i gave an honest reply.. fag
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Old 11-22-03, 12:37 AM   #5
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I wasnt feelin it to much, maybe make the lines a little more easier to flow to. Sense it is text and all, im pretty sure you can jump on the mic and make this sound hot. So I aint ganna play you. Keep the shit up hommie, keep elevatin

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Old 11-22-03, 01:47 PM   #6
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Old 11-22-03, 02:02 PM   #7
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Old 11-22-03, 02:36 PM   #8
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the flow was nice. but the content was ehhhhhh for a text piece .. probably would suit audio more if you made it into one, lack of multi's / internals took from the piece in my opinion .. some of the rhyming words seemed forced as fuck towards the end and i dint really feel the topic .. seemed kinda `bragging rights` type piece made my attention wonder well before the second verse ..


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Old 11-22-03, 02:39 PM   #9
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You show some potential. Creativity is there, flow was lacking a bit, but other than the short bars, this was a well tought out piece.

"I'm high in this game liek a 25 foot ladder"

^too simplistic, i suggest editing that line.

Nice shit, keep at it. Practice DOES make perfect.




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Old 11-22-03, 02:42 PM   #10
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the ladder line was forced... thanks
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Old 11-23-03, 01:25 AM   #11
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Old 11-23-03, 01:58 PM   #12
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Old 11-23-03, 11:20 PM   #13
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upp lemme get a few more reps
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Old 11-23-03, 11:31 PM   #14
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yeah the flow on this was a bit off, maybe because of the structure
if you fix the structure this could help with the flow also dont force the
lines and put more multi's but other than that it wasnt to bad...
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Old 11-23-03, 11:39 PM   #15
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Some call me grimey, others Loco
get-to-know-yo

i didnt like this line, i give this a 3/5
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