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11-29-03, 03:15 AM | #1 | ||||||
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...I Close My Eyes...
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4878#post934878 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94240 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95155 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95137 I close my eyes, and see a beautiful face, It's not misplaced in my mind, cause i can feel and taste the greatness, of this woman, shes been sent from above More beautiful by herself, then a flock of white doves, a symbol of love, as they flutter, fly through your dreams it might seem, like reality, taken to the extreme like the american dream, almost perfection in your eyes you can look even closer, still no imperfection will arise another beautiful sunrise, right before the sun sets before the ashes get put out again, like another cigarette a 3-d silhouette, because a dimension could never hold her always standing up straight, never with a chip on her shoulder the nights become colder, but warmed by the glow she emits while shes often soul soothing, by the vibe that she transmits you cant help but submit, you find yourself tapping out slow with your arms streached reaching, hoping the seeds will grow |
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11-29-03, 03:31 AM | #2 | |||
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This was a nice piece hommie. I liked the wordplay, and the ryme scheme. It was easy to flow to, nice little topic and all. Started off a little slow, but we all do that some times.
Can you return the favor and check " Complicated Man " in ma sig hommie. Nice drop right here though 8-8.5 / 10 OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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11-29-03, 06:46 AM | #3 | ||||||
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Up You Fucks....
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11-29-03, 08:14 AM | #4 | |||||
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Nice Drop, I agree with High class i will give it a /10
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11-29-03, 10:00 AM | #5 | |||||||
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this was a very written piece, i liked the emotional but most of all your wordplay and vocab that was awesome your metas and multies were awesome i wouldnt change nothing great read...keep it up pz
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11-29-03, 12:24 PM | #6 | ||||||
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Hell yeah man they said the right way to reply to a post was to tell you your strenghs and weaknesses . Well all you have is strenghs, Keep it up homie
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11-30-03, 02:24 AM | #7 | ||||||
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up.. on the second page...
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12-02-03, 11:02 PM | #8 | |||||||
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the emotion you described and the picture you painted were exquisite. deep thoughts from the heart. stayed on point and flowed nicely. well done
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