Topic: political injustice

(write about anything you've disagreed with in the past...really anything dealing with the government)

Due date: Dec 12th
Voting ends: Dec 15th

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I was in a contendorship match last week! and i won!

deacon....i did the rankings already for this
Maven and Ausp have it via PM
your PM box was full

and Rob D did win last week title shot

i know but with everything messed up with auspicious having a 5-0 record. i figured youd be cool about it...but if you really think its unfair ill switch him to it...whichever...


I've done the rankings already no worries but thanks for the effort...
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ill just have this battle,

SS dont even mean much anymore,
leagues going downhill,

checkin in...

I disagree with it going down hill...but yeah anyways thanks for workin with me on this....

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Im not political....this means nothing...dont take it personal i write better when my mind set is opposed to certain oppositions..


We went from high jackin votes to high jackin plains.
al Qaeda and afganistan but obviously iraqs to blame.
The same agenda as the one his father had
Grab a torch and scorch the lands until the damn Koran is ashed
Fast before iraq and all its lakies droppin science
Flyin germs that burn their alternative to violence
We’re finding links to terrorist and marijuana
Because its clear to see that arabs got a climate fit for ganja
You gottah know if its on Tv then its true
Its sad to see that MTVs the last good source of news..
Shoes is what we want though, give me two pair
Let the airforce win the war against an enemy that’s not there
Scared worse than ignorance is apathy
We’d rather be with family while Bush is stutterin through half his speech
Chant impeach until the land is rid of him
He couldn’t read his daddy’s lips cause he’s that illiterate
At times it gets you down on the spirit of DC
The land that killed the braves and the home of the SUV
Drive your Cherokees fast and buy gas
Support the war effort now while supplies last
Cause Iraq got bombs its never seen
Invisible weapons is such a threat to democracy
Its plain to me its going way past Iraq
So wrap his ass in plastic and duck tape for your disaster plans
Justice has us blind our eyes are sore.
Lets fight a war for fossil fuel because we’re run by dinosaurs
Well drive our forces to the boarder and take over
Without being sure if the choice was made sober
But yeah he’s acting for the sake of those who voted
Those who got their votes stolen on some family tree bullshit
Its for those whose votes just didn’t count
When electoral colleges totaled up on the amount
Your telling me that this man should be respected
When he’s takin us to war and didn’t get elected
He went from Texas to the whitehouse with a quickness
From executing retards to executive decisions
The truth is twisted and he’s spitting propaganda
The mans a terrorist that we ought to rid the land of
Disbanded the union if you got a half of heart
If not remove the Bush administration that’s a start..

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just wanted to say good luck Rob...im sure your gonna tear it.
im going to party bye
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Political injustice


The scenario

saturday afternoon shopping, a child with his mother,
3 years old,helping to pick presents for his brother,
eyes light up as he wanders to older boys with sweets,
they take his hand and lead him into the busy streets,
oblivious that hell never again feel happiness,he follows,
blatently unaware that the path ahead contains only sorrow,
how can two 10 year olds intentionally carry out such evil,
torture,dismember and destroy the body beyond retrieval,

The Governments reaction

lock the two child murderers away for 8 short years,
in the lap of luxury,living better than former peers,
then release them into civilisation fully grown men,
truly capable of commiting such a heinous crime again,
and this is supposed to be the british justice system,
reformation & reflection r supposed 2 b the principal sum,
instead its serve as little as possible,feel no remorse,
for crimes like this,the failing system is the source,

The Injustice

such an innocent life,taken in a cruel fashion,
the perpertrators should be shown no compassion,
instead they are permitted to resume their lives,
without out a thought for the parents deprived,
of the chance at watching there child grow,
laughing as he frolics in the winter snow,
how they make a gain from a senseless act,
is a political injustice,someone must react,

Deacon - You had a consistant flow, pretty good vocab, and had some pretty good lines in there. I dont agree with your thoughts in there, but you expressed your feelings really good. The rhyme scheme was really simple, and some vocab could have been used better. This was good, just didnt really shine in me eyes... Nice Drop though

Rob D - Pretty much the same deal, good flow, and some good lines in there. What made this really good was the subject you brought up, like your story and all. It was diffrent, and not many people would have come up with somthing like you did. I felt you used your vocab just right, and it was a good drop... Nice

Vote - Rob D

conclusion - I liked where he took te topic, and I was just feeling his verse more. It was a hard choice, because you could have put your own thought in there like Deacon did... Really Close...

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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def goin tha opposite way with my vote..............deacons opinion was more apparent and vivid, nyce twist rob, tha break down:

deacon: rhyme scheme: 8, flow: 7, story: 7.5, total: 22.5

rob: rhyme scheme: 6.5, flow: 7, story: 8, total: 21.5

rob your rhyme scheme hurt you and tha length kinda hurt you, good angle but you could have ran with it more.......

my vote goes to deacon, no hard feelins....may tha best man win....go peep my battle, stay real, peace, 1

and ooh yeah.......deacon i undastand that that is your opinion....but i totally disagree....no one else would have manned up in tymes of war and terror, and you cant get rid of tha union...tha building block of america, ( tha north) tha people that won tha fight.....think about it

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wow who would have guessed high class be the first to drop a vote......blah.....yeah i really dont mind Bush..hahha its easier to write pissed than it is happy so i decided to just throw a liberal sentiment into it...dont take any of it personally...i hate politics i could care less..lets see some more voties...

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