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Nuclear Concept Presents: A True Nigga
IP: 6236 079F
I dont need anti-biotics to feel no pain/
The shit I spit would make Maryln Manson look sane/ Rap is like weed something I crave/ It seems like every other nigga tries to put me in my grave/ Im not afraid of death, if someone pulls the teck, I wont run/ But thats why the only person I know is my self cuz I dont trust noone/ Other rappers thinkin we cool, until I hit em with disses/ Some niggas rat me out, but I got slugs snitches/ Hopin someone would kill me before I got to them/ But noone could fulfilll their wishes/ I get hit with slugs but stay kickin/ just for the simple pleasure of puttin the glock to the back of they heads an sayin, "Guess what, Im alive bitches!"/ Some of you claimin to be gangsta or thugs, well I am and I know it/ The way you rhyme sumtimes I have to think your a poet/ But Im fine where I am cuz I dont have one insecurity/ About my identity/ Cuz I'll always stay true, even if one day I were to get the fame and wealth/ I'll never be fake, cuz I'll always look in the mirror and be able to recognize my self/
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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IP: 19AF 50C1
2 short but other then that i like it maybe be more graphic
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted..
But this was ok....kinda short like Word said...but your structure could use some work though...some of your lines were stretched out there, should try to shorten them up a bit, cause it took away from the flow in this....but just keep at it. |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
thx for the feedback.
RESPONDED TO: WOR~P RULE WORD~P.
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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IP: 409D DA38
it was a ight keystyle flow was good wordplay ight vocab ok multis and punches ok over all 7.2/10
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IP: EB13 7871
AAAIght, not ill. Good basic verse structure, just lacked in vo cab and creativity. Keep it up son. Toner Rating 6.5/10
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