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Old 12-11-03, 02:57 PM   #1
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[Bash.]

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Bash,

This is straight of dope harder, Paying my dew
Your a fuckin' eye lash barber, Cuttin' the 'I do'
Out of your raps, Your back with a ghost write
Now when you write personal, you write ghost
A mic hoax, Are you a hulk? Well your a bama
Bash's is more plain than a hanger, Grammar
Is more choppy than a herb with Jamie Oliver
Take a screen test, Your a ganitor monitor
You contrast met-a-for like fans of the police
Its a law you can't have Po-Lease ' Dis-Six '
I'm proving you can bury someone. . In One
So I've Eaten You, and that was only One In
I'm like foster parents, Potents now Sonnin'

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Old 12-11-03, 03:02 PM   #2
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dis was a good short piece.
nice structure and wordplay, the flow was a bit hard for me to catch in areas, but keep it up

hit my rhyme
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Old 12-11-03, 03:11 PM   #3
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Old 12-11-03, 03:13 PM   #4
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ight, i thought the length of this piece could have been stretched out a bit coz it would av been good to read more.

Out of your raps, Your back with a ghost write
Now when you write personal, you write ghost

i liked this line especially as the ending to both sentences i thought were very good, although it didnt rhyme.

a few good multis and vocab was average in here.
6/10
hows dat.
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Old 12-11-03, 04:02 PM   #5
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loose ass punches. I expected something better for a diss drop, but oh well keep dropping.
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Old 12-11-03, 04:55 PM   #6
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eh..well...........It wasnt your best from all the things I've seen by you. It was okay. Kinda had kiddy punches but....to put it simple, it sounded liek a newbs verse. No hate or anything, just had to be honest. I know you can do better pot1ent keep spittin.
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Old 12-11-03, 04:59 PM   #7
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This was a decent diss..i followed it fine....Nice drop not much more to say...

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Old 12-11-03, 05:17 PM   #8
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Not A Bad Diss Po, Probly Coulda Been Longer. Flow Was Good. Punches You Had In There Didn't Really Hit Hard Enough Though.

You contrast met-a-for like fans of the police
Its a law you can't have Po-Lease ' Dis-Six '
^ ^ ^ Ill Wordplay.

Keep Um Comin Po.

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Old 12-11-03, 06:14 PM   #9
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Pretty good flow.. Not long enuff, I thought it was a pretty good drop jus not long enuff..
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Old 12-11-03, 06:35 PM   #10
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PO YOU ARE ONE OF MY FAVORITES AND YOU KNOW THIS BUT THIS LACKED HARDCORE NOTHING STOOD OUT AS FAR AS DISSESS AND OVERALL IT SEAMED VERY AMATUER......JUST BEING HONEST BROTHER
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Old 12-11-03, 06:40 PM   #11
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i gotta agree, this wasn't up to ya usual standard..lacking in ways......ya last drop was much better..this jus seemed put together, just wrote with out thinking...thats my opinion anyways.....pZ...
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