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Rest In Piece My Nigga
IP: C430 9FB2
Rest In Piece My Nigga
Kaylon Mosley Sunset: December 16, 2003 I heard the news, when i went to pick up my check today, some niggas killed my homie, rest in piece Kevin Mosley, I've known him since high school together, how can it be true, some bitches took my nigga, He had a one year old son he was forced to leave back, we got his back dawg, and you can best believe that, Teach him right from wrong, keep him from guns and crack, teach him to stay strong, keep his mind in tact, You left these streets alone, you gave em a rest, damn my nigga you didn't deserve it through your chest, whats wrong with these niggas, a week ago is when Barshay cousin died, that was enough to make a grown nigga cry, the day of the funeral wasn't suppose to be for you to say bye, now you gone and where does that leave us, with are heads held high, to survive, in guns we have to bust, it's that currupt, you was the friendliest, theses strains is to strenuous, these bars is just keepin us, From shinein throught to Jesus, But i know you'll put in a good word for me, Rest in Piece 12-16-2003 Homie Reviewed: Vescocity T.A. Dez Leave some feedback Last edited by CrackaBox187 : 12-18-03 at 11:11 PM. |
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IP: D95F 8163
this was alright...but i dunno if you meant 2003 or not cause its not 2004 yet lol...but anyways i could feel the emotion in this...good read i thought...structure could be fixed up though...try keeping all the lines the same length so it flows good...but keep at it.
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IP: 19AF 50C1
mnasta got a point but this had its flairs then its falls. it was good and if its real i offer my condolences.
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IP: C430 9FB2
Thanx yo for the "2003" comment, shit just got my head gone right now, can't think straight, and Word thanx for your condolences
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IP: 6FB5 CB03
sorry to hear your loss, my boy died last year so i feel you on that. nice lyrics too, flows good in my opinion. keep ya head up
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IP: FA99 FA83
sorry bout the loss
structure could use some work... other then that it was decent... keep up at it |
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IP: F934 2C2B
that was deep shit man and im sorry fo ya losses man............................................... ........................
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IP: 399E F0FD
..Sorry to hear about the loss...this piece was very emotional...my condolences go out for the family...............
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IP: 202C A952
Dunny... ya structure was on point dunny... some cats i guess dunno how to follow a verse... all the lines don't have to be the same... that was would wack... tired of hearin dat ish... structure doesn't mean ish unless it does flow... and well it did... so structure was canceled out... good piece dunny...
i'mma drop a piece like this after a while... one of my homies got blasted on to... and there is never enought shoulders to lean on believe dat... good piece dunny... Caesar On3 |
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IP: F302 444A
Yo that was aite- but me bein a emcee in improvement all I can say is enhance ya style and don't stop. Word of Mouf
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IP: A2A2 0D4C
SORRY BOUT YA LOSS YA FLOW WAS TIGHT
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IP: B7B3 41B1
ya sorry bout the loss but on the rap shit..........well it was pretty simple u know what i mean, need more multies and shit, for example try to rhyme every last 2 words of each line not jus the last one.......and dont use the same words too much .....it flowed aight so jus keep workin on the other shit
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Im sorry for the loss hommie. I know how it feels, just know he aint gotta put up with that shit anymore. Aight hommie...
- It was a simple write, had an alright flow. You didnt have much vocab at all. But I did feel emotion in this, and it really brought out the true colors of the rap. I liked it, it was just some straight gangsta shit. ya know... Well, keep ya head up hommie...
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IP: C1DA C961
yo im sry bout your boy hit my hail mary tell wut ya'll think be real...............................
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IP: 1E3A 659B
This piece was nice the way U put a delicate situation in the form of a writing. The structure was great because it reflects the change of emotions that U were going through. OVerall, about a 6.0/10.... Good drop....
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