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07-21-04, 01:54 PM | #1 | |||||||
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The Fact's Of My Life
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Asi cry and let the tears run down
my heart beats rapidly and head begins to pound Life suddenly has no meaning to me and if there is one it's small so i can't see i have endured alot of hradships and participated in a lot of relationships but never have i received and sympathy or remorse so i shall sit here and alow karma to take her course looking through my eyes is similar to being blind because ive bees searching and searching but it's not love i find instead it's heartachs and dissapoinment hatred and emptiness lonliness and disncontentment i have a mother but only when she wants to be she claims she loves me but hasen't proven it to me i have a father that soen't understand it's never asking, understanding but rather much a demand i had a significant other but little did i know tha the everlasting love would soon surely go i have friends but what's a friend if they haven't been where ive been how can we relate if both have a different fate so now it's just me , my pen , and my pad how can i be lonly if it's people i never had what's beauty without a soul what's lo ve if your heart is cold as you listen visualize pain, grief, and agony and if you place a face to these words that would be me a young woman in distress a female who's mind, body, and soul is a mess but just send me a prayer and i will do my best because i relized all it is is the devil putting me to the test so just send me a prayer and i will do my best and if i made it or not i will leave that up to you to guess The Facts Of My Life.* |
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07-21-04, 03:18 PM | #2 | ||||
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i love it. you werent wrong bout the poet shit.
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07-21-04, 08:16 PM | #3 | |||||||
Vendetta the K.O. King
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Heartfelt fasho - goodlookin. Work on grammer, or spelling though - as some parts were a little harder to flow with cause the word was "and" instead of "any". Was it supposed to be an off syllable count? I don't know alot about poetry - but I know some things I;ve read are not equal to the line previous - and I dont know if thats what you were going for or not. Good lookin anyways - keep droppin.
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07-22-04, 01:53 PM | #4 | ||||||
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
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IP: 1920 7C96
yea i feel u a 100% on dis drop almost decribes my life keep droppin mami holla
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07-23-04, 03:04 PM | #5 | |||||
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this was a good poem, nice deeply emotional words coming thru this piece, and what i liked is that, what u were feeling, i think everyone can relate to at one time or another, nice job and keep it up......
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