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Topic - " Infernal tidal waves "

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-09-05 at 02:33 PM

Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in.

(Stanza) has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-05 02:05 PM.

Devolve has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-05 02:09 PM.

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Thats Niec Mayne You Got Some Raw Talent ....Ima Go and drop This battle link In Some of those Vote shops You Jus lay Back Bcuz we bout to get some votes up in here LOL

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Voted For: Devolve

ight this is how i see it...

Devolve:

i liked this alot... you went deep into your topic explaining wit emotion whats happening and everything i enjoyed it every much. you need to work on yuor flow in some parts that is important i think, your vocab was very good, u stayed on the subject and gave a thoughur understanding of what was happening... here is one bar i think stood out from the rest:

Beckoning screeches of agony, sharp stabs of cold penetrate.
Lashing havoc batter the shores, hold back, reign & dictate.
^^ this was real good, this is where the waves hit am i right?

overall i felt you had a real strong verse for this well done keep droppin em man....


(stanza):

ight i thought your verse was good but i didn't think u showed some emotion until near the end which was a big flaw, try to go deep into your topic so u can get a better understanding, other than that the flow was good and your vocab was real good, just try to go deeper in your topics and show more emotion... here is one bar i think stood out from the rest:

So I Treid my best To out Run This Infernal Insanity
But every Move I Made It Stayed above Me In vanity
^^ this was easliy your best line had good vocab and this was kinda deep and u showed emotion

ight man u did alright but not as good as devolve so thats why i'm giving it to him,

v/ devolve for having a more indepth verse and showing more emotion in it..


rtf on any battle in my sig pz

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Voted For: Devolve

Devolve had this shit easily.Stanze....ur shit was basic.U started off talkin bout the beach all peaceful...then all a sudden started talkin tragic.Ur flow was good until that line bout water catching fire.From then on...ur verse fell apart.U had no decent metas and basic vocabulary.

Devolve got this easily.

Voted For: Devolve

Stanza- The best aspect from your verse was imaginary, The emotion kinda lacked in this verse. You had a great balance of vocab in your verse. But next time i suggest you use wordplays and meta'z unto your imaginary, but overall, this was a ok drop.

Devolve- Alright man, you had good imaginary, you had a great balance from your vocab. You had good balance of metaphors, I liked how you portray with words man...it was a nice drop.

CONCLUSION= Alright This battle has to be vote on by imaginary. The emotion ya'll BOTH need working on. Alright stanza you had good imaginary, but you didnt put out much details like devolve, and the metaphors was good. Alright...Devolve i vote for you because you put out alot of details in your imaginary, you had great balance of vocab in your verse. Metaphors was there, stanza the only reason i didnt vote for you because you had LESS details in your imaginary....

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Voted For: Devolve

stanza=
2 basic, nuthin out ov da oedinary creative wise. very poor vocabulary also, noit much imagination within ur verse & it wuz a lil hard 2 find any emotion in da words u exopressed, u culd ov used da scheme ov ur topic 2 much more effect, itz and ez win 4 devolve

Devolve=
good strong topical, vocab wuz strong, u seemed 2 have a more complex scheme an concept 2 ur peice. emotion wuz strong, especially towrds da end, u started off a lil slow but after da ''lashing havoc batter the shores'' line, u really picked up on emotion, imagination & creativity wuz good throughtout da peice, good enjoyable read.

Vote=Devolve-more emotion & a more complex scheme 2 da chosen concept.

rtf

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Damn You Got This Win .LOL Nice drop mayne i told you that you was good

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