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01-11-06, 01:04 AM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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Shot In The Dark
IP: CCF3 0222
Shot In The Dark Some days the sun rays shine down on his presence And the light from the night always comes with a lesson But it's time for confession, & he isn’t ready to face it So he remains complacent on steps outside of his basement Tries to erase him as he revises his statements Comprises his cards right on up threw his Ace's To his graced talents to valiant passions for violence Though misguided he'd assured his conscience enlightened So he stands, walks down the steps towards the corner Where former ideals use to conform for the boredom Now it's all broken as he strolls up towards the poor slums He's aimed for forgiveness, as it rains for his kin’s sins Soaked to the bone as he remains to repent them Rounding the walk way as his soul cries for tomorrow Although he hates all the sorrow, he knows his times borrowed Poison to swallow as the lump in his throat becomes hallow He's poised to embark and keeps moving despite the remarks .. Though he knows it's for not .. but it's a shot in the dark ..
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Crhyme Sindicate  The unexamined life is not worth living.
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01-11-06, 01:05 AM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=218809
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2613395
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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01-11-06, 02:48 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: F1FC 4749
damn, mentalz, that shit was tight......nice topic and descriptions.....reall tight.
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01-11-06, 06:55 PM
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Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 8752 F263
alot better than the pieces youve been writing lately
vocab was good flow was good structure was nice and clean
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01-11-06, 07:11 PM
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in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
ahh, sexy way to end the piece, nice topic, described very well through well determined thought process, i think, anyways, nice piece, good job on writing it, some linse were pretty fancy, like this one
So he stands, walks down the steps towards the corner Where former ideals use to conform for the boredom word, up, keep, writing, yeup
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01-12-06, 08:27 PM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
uppin, appreciate it.
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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01-13-06, 07:25 PM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: CCF3 0222
Leave me feed fuck faces.
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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01-14-06, 04:59 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
very good, u put a lot of emotion and story into it without makin it really long (somethin i have to work on
 )u have a lot of multis inside your rhymes which gives the piece good flow u got great vocab too... nice drop  RTF on my OM- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=219595 |
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01-16-06, 04:18 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: FA8B F186
Firstly, very well written…something about the way you wrote this, and ended it that makes it very effective – lyrically this was very good, and even though it is short and concise it is perfect for what you wrote about, besides there was still a lot of detail…Vocab was good, flow was great – helped by the many internals too…deep with a perfect feel to it, you are obviously very good at what you do....
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01-16-06, 04:26 PM
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Black Poet
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IP: 7BC4 5A05
Really nice drop Metalz really been droping some heat lately fams keep it up..
Really dope verse, imagery was dope flowed well nice use of vocab the whole verse was on point. Stay up fams 1~ |
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01-16-06, 04:47 PM
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I Chill in Asylums
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IP: 3E03 204F
Real nice piece man. I loved the vocab in this and the flow was real good. The imagery like critic said was dope. I really like this piece, it was simple and to the point. Nice job man, keep it up. Please RTF on Runnin' or Ballad of Death, links in my sig. Peace.
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01-28-06, 10:05 PM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: 2898 31F3
Uppin' for some feed.
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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01-29-06, 04:41 PM
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IP: 31C2 62EB
Word up homie this was a dope drop i was really feeling it , This was very well written nice ending i was really feeling it, you had nice emotions and very good feeling going into your drop overall pretty cool peice nice job homie.
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01-29-06, 06:53 PM
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-da prophit-
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IP: CF86 0039
loved that shit, lil 2 short but it was fucking awsome. nice vocab and some multies. but u really put that shit down kidd, do me a fav. and check out my new shit. time passing us by.
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01-29-06, 09:40 PM
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Welcome 2 Dope South
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=2633108
Nice Drop Fam.Keep doin yo thang It is way better than yo other drops dat i been readin
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