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Have you ever knew someone who was an alcoholic
Knew she had a problem, and that you would try to solve it But all it, happened just in a moment Blood running down her chest reached for a shirt hold it Fold it in half, pushing it even harder Knowing that she wouldn’t last to see your only daughter Yeah it’s kind of harder, to hold inside the pain Knowing that your momma no longer, no longer remains Inside your hart, tearing apart right at the veins Angels is speaking screaming, screaming out your name Fearing what happened to her would happen to you the same It wasn’t my fault mom; you’re the only one to blame Lives in an instant, if you blink would you probley miss it Take a picture to remember to let everyone know you miss it You seen her inside your dreams suddenly no more existence The fans leak out an anxious scream that’s gone just in an instant Encore no more it’s just the end of scene what do you mean are you stopping Lyrics what do they mean keeping it fresh but yet just so clean My lyrics all sudden there rotten have you forgotten about your mothers embrace knowing that you would die just to take her place and see her place on the other side of the mountain wishing you could drink from holly fountain Scream from the shelter knowing that you couldn’t help her Upon your face the past erase wit no escape live in world of hate New you couldn’t live upon the statue you know her life impact you Look how you react to ever little sound of her voice don’t just look around and rejoice Chorus 1 So when she’s gone just remain calm You gave it up on the mic to drop bombs But always remember memory of your mother And when it happens just snap back with the juice Listen to the music as it speaks to you momma I always love you I sit here and witness the death of my mother Who had my back through what ever in any weather? Cold hot or warm Embrace in the hart torn apart a burned Every time you start to see your mother To love each other threw night and day Anyway to get her pack it’s whack I hope it don’t happen to you You wouldn’t know how to react Know how to feel the pain is real It turns in my guts like a thousand cuts Not enough to stop rapping In my words my mother lives In the heaven my mother gives Back to me heavenly angel I see And one day she’ll be with me chorus 2 before she gone just hug yo mom on point believe it could happin while you smokin a joint nothing is to good just love your hood give courage to your mom which you know you should before your second is gone. Last edited by lil S : 01-04-06 at 12:32 AM. |
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Gotta drop twolinks to feed you've left recently or this is gona' get closed.
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Seems like it follows Em's concept alot, same rythem. Nice wordplay and Idea. But sorry to say I can't really get into it...even though it's not biting, it just seems to close to it for me. No what i'm saying? No hate. Peace.
Bit of a crit. When you write to a beat, try and switch the concept to something different, even the rythem so it doesnt sound like they're saying it when you read it. Pay attention to your structure a little better... alot of people dont think it matters... but an acurate syllable count goes along way. Vocab and Multies. Rhyming with the one syllable words internal of finishing a line like : My dog sat strapped on cats like a wack misshap So my dad trapped a bat with a baseball bat// Hella retarded example but you get the idea. Peace
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